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Some people say that in all levels of education too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

Some people say that in all levels of education too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 3
Learning history is by far the most decisive factor among students. Some people agree that students should be taught local history than world history. This essay will outline with this statement. This is because, student has to comment past and future events by the help of history, and It will be develop his opinion about world. First of all, it is true that nation's history allows school children to understand the past, and gives an idea at the present time. They can learn important information from their grandfathers, teachers or especially historical places. For example, there is an activity that Turkish school children are taken to Anıtkabir, Çanakkale which are significant for Turkish Nation. What is more, students can better know their ancestors what they did past, and what we should do. As a result, this situation might have had deeply effect on them to adopt his country’s value. On the other hand, studying in world instead of local history might bring numerous bad effects. This information must give students, but they must be limited. When they get knowledge, people can ignore their history, and feel a plenty of admiration another country’s past. To illustrate, any country does not want to teach history of fascism in school. The reason is that they are scared to influence students who like to become a Hitler or Benito Mussolini. In conclusion, I firmly agree that students should spend more time in nation history instead of history of world because that will change your idea where my country position is in the world, and improve judge skills.
Learning
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students
.
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people
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agree
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students
should
be taught
local
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history
than
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world
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history
. This essay will outline with this statement. This is
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because
,
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student
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has to
comment
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past
and future
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events
by the
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help
of
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history
, and It will be
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develop
his opinion about world.

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First of all
, it is true that nation's
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history
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allows
school children to understand the
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past
, and gives an
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idea
at the present time. They can learn
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important
information from their grandfathers, teachers or
especially
historical places.
For example
, there is an activity that Turkish school children
are taken
to
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Anıtkabir
,
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Çanakkale
which are significant for Turkish Nation.
What is more
,
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students
can better know their ancestors what they did
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past
, and what we should do.
As a result
, this situation might have had
deeply
effect on them to adopt his
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country’s
value.

On the other hand
, studying in
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world
instead
of local
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history
might bring numerous
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bad
effects. This information
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must
give
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students
,
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but
they
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must
be limited
. When they
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get
knowledge,
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people
can
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ignore
their
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history
, and feel a
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plenty
of admiration another
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country’s
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past
. To illustrate, any
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country
does not want to teach
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history
of fascism in school. The reason is that they
are scared
to influence
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students
who like to become a Hitler or Benito Mussolini.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
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agree
that
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students
should spend more time in nation
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history
instead
of
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history
of
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world
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because
that will
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change
your
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idea
where my
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country
position is in the
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world
, and
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improve
judge
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skills
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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