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“Some people say that in all levels of education too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree? ” v.1

“Some people say that in all levels of education too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. ” v. 1
Apart from covering the essay (which was quite interesting), you are addressing a topic that has bothered me for a while now. Too many people online claims to be tutors for exams such as IELTS, TOEFL or any level of the Cambridge Certificate Exams, yet they teach imprecise or even wrong information about the tests. I feel like many mock tests are scored too high on YouTube to attract an audience by claiming to show an example of a band 8 or 9 examinations though clearly not been on this level. I do not say that only native speakers should teach English (or any other language) but I also noticed quite some IELTS teachers who offer advice on how to get a high band score, although although they'd - judging on how they express themselves in these videos - would hardly reach one themselves. I do not want to bad mouth anyone but I'm afraid that many students are too reliant on these people. Back in school, one of my English teachers wasn't really good at all, neither at teaching nor when it came to anything related to the English language. (Everyone knew that her passion was Spanish and she only taught English because teachers must do two subjects here in Germany. ) So I possess first-hand knowledge that bad pronunciation, grammar, intonation and poor choice of words do not only rub off on students but also give a wrong estimate on ones own abilities. I feel sorry for these people who compare themselves to wrongly marked mock tests and end up going into the real exams with a wrong expectation only to end up disappointed when they get their results.
Apart from covering the essay (which was quite interesting), you are addressing a topic that has bothered me for a while
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they teach imprecise or even
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wrong
information about the
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. I feel like
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many
mock
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are scored
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show
an example of a band 8 or 9 examinations though
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native speakers should teach English (or any other language)
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IELTS teachers who offer advice on how to
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get
a high band score,
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although although
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judging on how they express themselves in these videos
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do not want to
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mouth anyone
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but
I'm afraid that
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many
students are too reliant on these
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people
. Back in school, one of my English teachers wasn't
really
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good
at all, neither at teaching nor when it came to anything related to the English language. (Everyone knew that her passion was
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Spanish and
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taught English
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teachers
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do two subjects here in Germany.
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-hand knowledge that
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bad
pronunciation, grammar, intonation and poor choice of words do not
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only
rub off on students
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but
also
give a
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wrong
estimate on ones
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own
abilities.

I feel sorry for these
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people
who compare themselves to
wrongly
marked mock
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tests
and
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end
up going into the real exams with a
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wrong
expectation
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only
to
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end
up disappointed when they
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get
their results.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
The most intimate temper of a people, its deepest soul, is above all in its language.
Jules Michelet

IELTS essay “Some people say that in all levels of education too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. ” v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
281 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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