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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 1
Learning is not only an integeral part of our day to day activity, but also very important for the students who are the future of tomorrow. Some say that the money spent on the education of children does provide them with facts but not with any practical skillset, to which I definitely agree. It's like a race and each individual is trying to be first, moreover they are like people with no desire to learn something out of the box or practical. Instead of going out to the ground and getting their hands dirty, the pupils think their hard work is well deserved staring at the books. The universities charge extra money and than provide facts which are printed in a decade old book, which the kids can also google and can get better answers. For example, a study found that 40% of the schools in the UK have students, who are introverts as are not exposed to the broader aspect of study. Initially the schools and universities were made so that the youngsters can gain vast knowledge, however now they have become just a profit making business. The students are nobody's concern, till everybody is getting paid with the same old book why to do something different. The Kids who are smart understand and opt for better places and grow as an individual, while the other stay in same situation. For instance, a study in India stated that only 10% of the students acheive practical knowledge before their first job, which is generally around 22 years. In conclusion, the education bodies are not changing anytime soon, the parents and their offsprings have to do a proper reasearch before thinking of some real education.
Learning is not
only
an
integeral
part of our
day to day
activity,
but
also
very
important
for the
students
who are the future of tomorrow.
Some
say that the money spent on the education of children does provide them with facts
but
not with any practical
skillset
, to which I definitely
agree
.

It's like a race and each individual is trying to be
first
,
moreover
they are like
people
with no desire to learn something out of the box or practical.
Instead
of going out to the ground and getting their hands dirty, the pupils
think
their
hard
work is well deserved staring at the books. The universities charge extra money and
than
provide facts which
are printed
in a decade
old
book, which the kids can
also
google and can
get
better answers.
For example
, a study found that 40% of the schools in the UK have
students
, who are introverts as are not exposed to the broader aspect of study.

Initially
the schools and universities
were made
so
that the youngsters can gain vast knowledge,
however
now
they have become
just
a profit making business. The
students
are nobody's concern, till everybody is getting paid with the same
old
book why to do something
different
. The Kids who are smart understand and opt for better places and grow as an individual, while the other stay in same situation.
For instance
, a study in India stated that
only
10% of the
students
acheive
practical knowledge
before
their
first
job, which is
generally
around 22 years.

In conclusion
, the education bodies are not changing anytime
soon
, the parents and their offsprings
have to
do a proper
reasearch
before
thinking of
some
real education.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
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