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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. Do you agree or disagree? v.5

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. v. 5
The educational aspects of the student's whole academic life are being widely discussed nowadays. While some individuals believe the teaching institutions should focus their courses on learning theoretical facts, others think that practical skills should be prioritized. In this essay, I'm going to explain why I strongly believe that learning theory is even more important than practicing. One advantage of learning theory is that it is a prerequisite for having success performing many activities. This is due to the reason that without properly knowledge of a subject, it is not possible to understand how it works and consequently, make it works. To illustrate, imagine how dangerous would be a chemistry class where students are mixing different components without knowing exactly what they are and how they behave together. This could even cause an accident. Additionally, learning practical skills can be a very difficult task, depending on the subject. This happens because some activities are complex, requiring this way huge efforts to be dominated. If it is not the person's interest, it will probably give up before learning it. For instance, students in an arts class have different natural gifts and interests. It would be unfair to have all of them learning how to wood carving. However, the theory of it could be easily taught for everybody. To sum up, the importance of the theoretical knowledge and the complexity of doing several activities clearly makes me think that all schools and universities should keep the knowledge of the books in first place, before thinking about teaching its students practical skills.
The educational aspects of the student's whole academic life are being
widely
discussed nowadays. While
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some
individuals believe the teaching institutions should focus their courses on
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learning
theoretical facts, others
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think
that practical
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skills
should
be prioritized
. In this essay, I'm going to
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explain
why I
strongly
believe that
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learning
theory is even more
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important
than practicing.

One advantage of
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learning
theory is that it is a prerequisite for having success performing
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many
activities. This is due to the reason that without
properly
knowledge of a subject, it is not possible to understand how it works and
consequently
,
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make
it works. To illustrate, imagine how
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dangerous
would be a chemistry
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class
where students are mixing
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different
components without knowing exactly what they are and how they behave together. This could even cause an accident.

Additionally
,
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learning
practical
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skills
can be a
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very
difficult task, depending on the subject. This happens
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because
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some
activities are complex, requiring this way huge efforts to
be dominated
. If it is not the person's interest, it will
probably
give up
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before
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
it.
For instance
, students in an arts
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class
have
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different
natural gifts and interests. It would be unfair to have all of them
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
how to wood carving.
However
, the theory of it could be
easily
taught for everybody.

To sum up, the importance of the theoretical knowledge and the complexity of doing several activities
clearly
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makes
me
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think
that all schools and universities should
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keep
the knowledge of the books in
first
place,
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before
thinking about teaching its students practical
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skills
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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