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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. Do you agree or disagree? v.13

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. v. 13
Most of the schools and colleges emphasize the theoretical knowledge than the practical approach of teaching. In my opinion, I agree that university curriculum is focused more on teaching and trying to memorize the subjects rather than showing their actual use cases in the real world. Firstly, many schools and colleges don’t have the necessary equipment to conduct the experiments and hence they will spend more time on teaching other things. This kind of knowledge will not be helpful for a student to succeed in a workplace. For example, most of the electrical engineers in these days don’t know how to fix a capacitor in ceiling fan and students graduated with an MBA in finance doesn’t know how to file an income tax return. Secondly, most colleges and schools are lack of specialised teaching faculty so they will follow a laymen style of listening, writing and reading procedure. In the recent survey by times of India magazine reveals that 97% of the students who are currently studying engineering will not suit for technical jobs, the main reason for this is the lack of practical thinking. Finally, universities are considering education as a business option, so their main objective is to place their college students into companies so that they can show 100% placement for marketing. Due to this, educational institutions are focusing on only question and answer-based approach to learning and completely neglecting the necessity of practical knowledge. This will affect the student after starts working in the real world since the problem-solving skills are not being taught to him in college. In conclusion, with the increasing emphasis of education, colleges failed in arranging necessary laboratories and equipment’s to conduct the experiments so to manage their mistakes they are focussing more on teaching facts.
Most of the schools and colleges emphasize the theoretical knowledge than the practical approach of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
. In my opinion, I
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agree
that university curriculum
is focused
more on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
and trying to memorize the subjects
rather
than showing their actual
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
cases in the real world.

Firstly
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
schools and colleges don’t have the necessary equipment to conduct the experiments and
hence
they will spend more time on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
other things. This kind of knowledge will not be helpful for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
to succeed in a workplace.
For example
, most of the electrical engineers in these days don’t know how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
a capacitor in ceiling fan and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
graduated with an MBA in finance doesn’t know how to file an income tax return.

Secondly
, most colleges and schools are lack of
Possible spelling mistake. 'specialised' is British English.
specialised
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
faculty
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they will follow a laymen style of listening, writing and reading procedure. In the recent survey by times of India magazine reveals that 97% of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
who are
currently
studying engineering will not suit for technical jobs, the main reason for this is the lack of practical thinking.

Finally
, universities are considering education as a business option,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
their main objective is to place their college
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
into
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
100% placement for marketing. Due to this, educational institutions are focusing on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
question and answer-based approach to learning and completely neglecting the necessity of practical knowledge. This will affect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
after
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
working in the real world since the problem-solving
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
are not
being taught
to him in college.

In conclusion
, with the increasing emphasis of education, colleges failed in arranging necessary laboratories and equipment’s to conduct the experiments
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
to manage their mistakes they are focussing more on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
facts.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. v. 13

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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