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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree? v.24

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 24
It is believed that, in the due course of education, a lot is focused only on learning facts and figures, however, there is very little concentration on the practical skills. In my opinion, this is the truth of our education system and I completely agree that, our system lacks hands on practice of vital and practical skills. Firstly, many professions demand only technical knowhow, rather than theory, like chef, painters, makeup artists and so on. Any educational institute does not provide hands on practice in these fields, which is of utmost importance. Moreover, numerous schools and universities aim at teaching facts, that are mentioned in the books and are many a times irrelevant for various professions. One can easily educate oneself, by reading and going through these books. We do not require educational centers for the same. To illustrate, a student who desires to be an artist in the future, does not need to spend his quality time in learning about the past(history). One needs to take up art or some similar classes, in order to be successful in one’s career. Therefore, a lot of precious time is wasted in learning irrelevant matter. Secondly, it is considered that, even after achieving an educational degree, one needs to go through vigorous practical trainings, as students have never faced real life experiences. They have no idea, of how challenging it can be, to work with deadlines or to work under pressure. This can be the real evaluation of their knowledge. Unfortunately, most of them cannot perform in these evaluations and fail terribly, because of zero practical knowledge. For instance, when doctors put in 25 years of their life into education, they are still not allowed to perform an operation on a patient, until they have taken extra practical trainings, for minimum 2 years under other senior doctors. Consequently, those 25 years are of very little value without practical skills. In conclusion, I concur that practical knowledge is a must, on all levels of education, as learning only facts will not be beneficial in today’s competitive world. I also believe that, our education system will soon change, for the betterment of the students.
It
is believed
that, in the due course of
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education
, a lot
is focused
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only
on
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learning
facts and figures,
however
, there is
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very
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little
concentration on the
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practical
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skills
. In my opinion, this is the truth of our
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education
system and I completely
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agree
that, our system lacks hands on practice of vital and
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practical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

Firstly
,
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many
professions demand
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only
technical
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knowhow
,
rather
than theory, like chef, painters, makeup artists and
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so
on. Any educational institute does not provide hands on practice in these fields, which is of utmost importance.
Moreover
, numerous schools and universities aim at teaching facts, that
are mentioned
in the books and are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
a times irrelevant for various professions. One can
easily
educate oneself, by reading and going through these books. We do not require educational centers for the same. To illustrate, a student who desires to be an artist in the future, does not need to spend his quality time in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
about the past(history). One needs to take up art or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
similar classes, in order to be successful in one’s career.
Therefore
,
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a lot of
precious time
is wasted
in
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learning
irrelevant matter.

Secondly
, it
is considered
that, even after achieving an educational degree, one needs to go through vigorous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
practical
trainings, as students have never faced real life experiences. They have no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
, of how challenging it can be, to work with deadlines or to work under pressure. This can be the real evaluation of their knowledge. Unfortunately, most of them cannot perform in these evaluations and fail
terribly
,
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because
of zero
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
practical
knowledge.
For instance
, when doctors put in 25 years of their life into
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
, they are
still
not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to perform an operation on a patient, until they have taken extra
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
practical
trainings, for minimum 2 years under other senior doctors.
Consequently
, those 25 years are of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
value without
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practical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

In conclusion
, I concur that
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practical
knowledge is a
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must
, on all levels of
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education
, as
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learning
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
facts will not be beneficial in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
’s competitive world. I
also
believe that, our
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education
system will
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soon
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
, for the betterment of the students.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 24

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4 paragraphs
360 words
6.0
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