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Essay topics: TPO 45- independent writing taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their o v.2

Essay topics: TPO 45- independent writing task In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their o v. 2
I absolutly agree with this argument because some spacial reason. It can be seen in different nations with remarkeblly different culture which this fact is incredibly true. As we can see the structure of the family, society rules and individual thinking have been changed magnificently. The first point I would like to make is the structure of the family. As a sort of the fact, by evolutionary effects on the nations the number of the families relatively have been reschedules in all around the worlds. This change is caused the family be more smaller than the past and it make the young people to think diffrently from the old time. Furethemore, these young ones want to choose their individual choices. And this fact, by decreasing of the children in one house has been more important and it replaced to one feature of the indeviduality and inherently of the young person to do their work independently. The second point that I' d like to make is that the society stucture in the educational part have benn change remarkebly. It has been widespread in different part of the country and is more accessable for low income group of the society. By this event more people can think more independently and more critically which is caused the any one want to choose any their disired things in every aspect of their life from religous, to very low important decision like what he/she want to eat. Finally, I think there is one thing that have had always a very crucial and marvelous effect on every aspect of the evolutionary process in the history, is the economy. By this point of view, I think by increasing of the income per-capita in nations and letting to go to work individually by the young person in this process, we can see very novel matters. As this matter, we can mention to more financial independency between young children of the family. Because in the past we can see that the most of the work was family base and agricultural, so, the young person in the family must do that works which the father or family ordered to him or her and the earning of this effords was not for the young man directly. While, in the modern situation we can see that the young person must to go to their indivitual work in very low ages and they can have their own money which help them to be more confident rather than the same age person in the past. Conclusively, this is very important that the people in the family and the politician and government be awarded about this incredibly important and crucial fact in the society to have a better and more plesuare and effective choices.
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absolutly
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agree
with this argument
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because
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some
spacial reason. It can be
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seen
in
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different
nations with
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remarkeblly
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different
culture which this
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fact
is
incredibly
true. As we can
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see
the structure of the
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family
,
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society
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rules
and individual thinking have been
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changed
magnificently
.

The
first
point I would like to
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make
is the structure of the
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family
. As a sort of the
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fact
, by evolutionary effects on the nations the number of the
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families
relatively
have been reschedules in all around the worlds. This
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change
is caused
the
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family
be
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more smaller
than the past and it
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make
the
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young
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people
to
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think
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diffrently
from the
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old
time.
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Furethemore
, these
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young
ones want to choose their individual choices. And this
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fact
, by decreasing of the children in one
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house
has been more
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important
and it replaced to one feature of the
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indeviduality
and
inherently
of the
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young
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person
to do their
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work
independently
.

The second point that
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I&
#039; d like to
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make
is that the
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society
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stucture
in the educational part have
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benn
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change
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remarkebly
. It has been widespread in
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different
part of the country and is more
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accessable
for low income group of the
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society
. By this
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event
more
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people
can
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think
more
independently
and more
critically
which
is caused
the
Did you mean "anyone"?
any one
want to choose
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any their disired
things in every aspect of their life from
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religous
, to
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very
low
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important
decision like what he/she want to eat.

Finally
, I
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think
there is one thing that have had always a
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very
crucial and marvelous effect on every aspect of the evolutionary process in the history, is the economy. By this point of view, I
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think
by increasing of the income
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per-capita
in nations and letting to go to
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work
individually
by the
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young
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person
in this process, we can
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see
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very
novel matters. As this matter, we can mention to more financial
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independency
between
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young
children of the
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family
.
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Because
in the past we can
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see
that the most of the
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work
was
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family
base and agricultural,
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so
, the
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young
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person
in the
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family
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must
do that works which the father or
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family
ordered to him or her and the earning of this
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effords
was not for the
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young
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man
directly
. While, in the modern situation we can
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see
that the
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young
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person
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must to
go to their
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indivitual
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work
in
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very
low
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ages and
they can have their
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own
money which
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help
them to be more confident
rather
than the same age
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person
in the past.

Conclusively
, this is
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very
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important
that the
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people
in the
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family
and the politician and
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government
be awarded
about this
incredibly
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important
and crucial
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fact
in the
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society
to have a better and more
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plesuare
and effective choices.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Mistakes

IELTS essay Essay topics: TPO 45- independent writing task In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their o v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
459 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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