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Some people say that humanitarian subjects such as philosophy, history and literature that people study in universities have no value for their future career. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion and relevant v.1

Some people say that humanitarian subjects such as philosophy, history and literature that people study in universities have no value for their future career. with this statement? Give your own opinion and relevant v. 1
In the contemporary era, tourism has become one of the most crucial economic sectors in the world. However, it leads to conflict between people who come from different cultures rather than creating a friendly atmosphere. However, for some logical reasons, I also support this notion to a large extent. Therefore, reasons with appropriate justifications are discussed in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, There are several reasons why international tourism creates discrepancies among people belonging to different habits and cultures. The first and foremost reason is the lack of understanding of other cultures and languages. To elaborate, foreign visitors do not have good command of other nation's languages and habits. As a result, by mistake, they generate problems for other native people rather than making good connections. For instance, India is a diverse country, therefore every region has its own different culture, which becomes more difficult for universal visitors who comes from different places in the world, such as Australia, America, Canada, and many more. Especially, This is the main reason, which fully supports the given notion. Furthermore, another reason which supports this view is that global visitors do not respect the other native cultures. To precise more, they do not behave respectfully. Consequently, it builds the inequality of cultures among the people. On the contradictory side, despite these problems, the tourism industry has benefits too. To begin with, they help in the way of cultural exchange, which should not be underestimated. To explain this, they come to explore the different places of other countries, but sometimes they make international friends. This also counts in cultural exchange parameters. For example, according to the report published by the New York Times, the reason behind the cultural exchange is the international friendships among global people, which made during their international trips. In conclusion, although the tourism industry generates conflict for native people rather than communicate with them and make the best relationships, they have some advantages too. However, I believe that negative perspectives are greater than their positives, such as inappropriate knowledge and aim to diminish other's cultures
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has become one of the most crucial economic sectors in the world.
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people
who
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come
from
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rather
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logical
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reasons
, I
also
support this notion to a large extent.
Therefore
,
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reasons
with appropriate justifications
are discussed
in the subsequent paragraphs.

To commence with, There are several
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reasons
why
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international
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tourism
creates discrepancies among
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people
belonging to
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different
habits and
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cultures
. The
first
and foremost
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reason
is the lack of understanding of
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other
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cultures
and languages. To elaborate, foreign visitors do not have
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good
command of
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other
nation's languages and habits.
As a result
, by mistake, they generate problems for
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other
native
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people
rather
than making
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good
connections.
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, India is a diverse country,
therefore
every region has its
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, which becomes more difficult for universal visitors who
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fully
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Furthermore
, another
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reason
which supports this view is that global visitors do not respect the
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other
native
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cultures
. To precise more, they do not behave
respectfully
.
Consequently
, it builds the inequality of
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cultures
among the
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people
.

On the contradictory side, despite these problems, the
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industry has benefits too. To
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with, they
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in the way of cultural exchange, which should not
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friends. This
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For example
, according to the report published by the New York Times, the
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reason
behind the cultural exchange is the
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international
friendships among global
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people
, which made during their
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trips.

In conclusion
, although the
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industry generates conflict for native
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rather
than communicate with them and
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IELTS essay Some people say that humanitarian subjects such as philosophy, history and literature that people study in universities have no value for their future career. with this statement? Give your own opinion and relevant v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
345 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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