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Some people say that health care and education should be the responsibility of the government but others think that it is the responsibility of the individuals themselves. v.6

Some people say that health care and education should be the responsibility of the government but others think that it is the responsibility of the individuals themselves. v. 6
As people have paid taxes to the government, it is believed that they should be provided with free healthcare and qualified education. However, others disagree with the statement, as they think that each individual should be responsible for his or her own health and education. The following essay will discuss both views in details. On the one hand, many people believe that it is the government's responsibility to provide standard health care and decent education to their people. As people have paid income taxes, property taxes, value added taxes and other kinds of fees to the government, these funds should also be beneficial for the people as well. Some portions of the budget should be allocated to fund medical activities and educational programs. Having a lot of educated and healthy residents brings many benefits for the government, as there are a lot of skill and productive labours in the country who would develop the country's economic sector. On the other hand, some people believe that health and education is a personal matter as it is the responsibility of each individual to maintain own their health and education. They disagree if education and healthcare should be funded from the taxes. They think that it is unfair because some people might be working hard and paid a large amount of taxes, but others might be indolent or jobless and get the same benefits from the government. Therefore they believe that healthcare and education should be standalone institutions, and each people should pay for getting a good education and maintaining their own health. In conclusion, to a certain point, I would agree that it is the government's task to provide education and healthcare for their people, as some poor people might not be able to get a good education and decent healthcare. However, although these services might be provided by the government for free, each individual's must be responsible for their own education and healthcare, as these services are funded by taxes that are paid by the public.
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education
.
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health
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details
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people
believe that it is the
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government
's responsibility to provide standard
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health
care and decent
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education
to their
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people
. As
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income
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, property
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, value
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added
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and
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kinds of fees to the
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government
, these funds should
also
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as well
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portions of the budget should
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to fund medical activities and educational programs. Having
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a lot of
educated and healthy residents brings
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benefits for the
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government
, as there are
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skill
and productive
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labours
in the country who would develop the country's economic sector.

On the
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hand,
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believe that
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is a personal matter as it is the responsibility of each individual to maintain
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education
. They disagree if
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and healthcare should
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. They
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,
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others
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be indolent or jobless and
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the same benefits from the
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they believe that healthcare and
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should be standalone institutions, and each
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should pay for getting a
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good
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education
and maintaining their
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own
health.

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agree
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's task to provide
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education
and healthcare for their
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people
, as
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poor
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people
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not be able to
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get
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good
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However
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be provided
by the
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for free, each individual's
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education
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paid
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8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that health care and education should be the responsibility of the government but others think that it is the responsibility of the individuals themselves. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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