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Some people say that government should not put money on building theatres and sports stadiums. Others argue that they should spend more money on medical care and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people say that government should not put money on building theatres and sports stadiums. Others argue that they should spend more money on medical care and education. v. 1
It is often argued that government does not need to spend on constructing theatres and sports stadiums, while they should pay more in health care and education. In my opinion, it is upon to country financial statement to support those arguments. It is beneficial that opera houses or stadiums, maybe become one of the most famous cultural icons of each country. But, in order to build each place often costs a huge capital resource that not all countries can afford. For an instance, Vietnam parliament had some discussions about making an opera house in the new central district of Ho Chi Minh city in 2017. Though it was a quarrel because of the priorities in the city budget and much rejection from the citizens. The other side of the research is that government should spend more on medic and training, at least 20 percent of all sectors. It is obviously that those problems are always the key factors for human development. Taking the USA as an example, people voted more for Obama than his rival because he was the one and only president applicant who supported for public health at that time. Though those tends to pay money on which types, it is clear that they will get good marks in case of public supports. In my option, if there is an exceed in a state's bank account, the council will easily balance the investments in which are more important in each period of time. In conclusion, the payment for culture or human usually is always a tremendous hard resolution in this globe. It is hardly believed that some country can pay for a theatre or a sport ground while their people are still starving and illiterate. Socialization can help these things to survive in case which area is less important than the other.
It is
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often
argued that
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government
does not need to spend on constructing
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theatres
and sports stadiums, while they should pay more in health care and education. In my opinion, it is upon to
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country
financial statement to support those arguments.

It is beneficial that opera
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houses
or stadiums, maybe become one of the most
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famous
cultural icons of each
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country
.
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But
, in order to build each place
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often
costs a huge capital resource that not all
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countries
can afford. For an instance, Vietnam parliament had
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some
discussions about making an opera
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house
in the new central district of
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Ho Chi Minh city
in 2017. Though it was a quarrel
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because
of the priorities in the city budget and much rejection from the citizens.

The other side of the research is that
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government
should spend more on medic and training, at least 20 percent of all sectors. It is
obviously
that those problems are always the key factors for human development. Taking the USA as an example,
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people
voted more for Obama than his rival
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because
he was the one and
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only
president applicant who supported for public health at that time.

Though
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those tends
to pay money on which types, it is
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clear
that they will
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get
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good
marks in case of public supports. In my option, if there is
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an exceed
in a state's bank account, the
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council
will
easily
balance the investments in which are more
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important
in each period of time.

In conclusion
, the payment for culture or human
usually
is always a tremendous
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hard
resolution in this globe. It is hardly believed that
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some
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country
can pay for a
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theatre
or a sport ground while their
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people
are
still
starving and illiterate. Socialization can
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help
these things to survive in case which area is less
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important
than the other.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that government should not put money on building theatres and sports stadiums. Others argue that they should spend more money on medical care and education. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
304 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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