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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.22

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. v. 22
The responsibility of teaching the children to become good civilians of the society is debatable. Some people claim it is the duty of parents, however, others feel schools are the best place for that. This essay will discuss both the views and explain why parents play a major part in nurturing the child to become a valuable person. On one side, parents are the first role models for the children and hence they are greatly influenced by the behaviour of their parents. In addition, these forerunners can mould their characters, since the little ones are in the process of learning. Moreover, if the children develop bad qualities in this phase of life, then later it becomes difficult to change. For instance, children who keep telling lies continue to do the same, even when they are grown up. Therefore, a good parenting style of nurturing the children matters a lot, especially in bringing out the best in them. On the other side, schools are another spot where a child is exposed to multiple characters. Although, teachers do help in shaping the attitude of a child, they can only do the fine tuning part. In other words, choosing a bad quality depends on the innate character or upbringing of a child. Teachers can be a guiding light to children and make them learn better manners. For instance, children tend to become social and make new friends at schools, who are from a different culture and religion. To summarise, parents are important in developing a child to understand the fabric of a society, while teachers are of help in further shaping of an individual at school. Although, teachers can blend the nature of a child, still it is the duty of parents to nurture a child to cope up with the society. Therefore, those children with good upbringing can become good civilians of the society.
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to
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good
civilians of the
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society
is debatable.
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people
claim it is the duty of
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parents
,
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schools
are the best place for that. This essay will discuss both the views and
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explain
why
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parents
play a major part in nurturing the
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child
to
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become
a valuable person.

On one side,
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parents
are the
first
role models for the
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children
and
hence
they are
greatly
influenced by the
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behaviour
of their
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parents
.
In addition
, these forerunners can
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mould
their characters, since the
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little
ones are in the process of learning.
Moreover
, if the
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children
develop
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bad
qualities in this phase of life, then later it
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becomes
difficult to
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change
.
For instance
,
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children
who
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keep
telling lies continue to do the same, even when they
are grown
up.
Therefore
, a
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good
parenting style of nurturing the
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children
matters a lot,
especially
in bringing out the best in them.

On the other side,
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schools
are another spot where a
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child
is exposed
to multiple characters. Although,
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teachers
do
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help
in shaping the attitude of a
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child
, they can
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only
do the
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fine tuning
part.
In other words
, choosing a
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bad
quality depends on the innate character or upbringing of a
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child
.
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Teachers
can be a guiding light to
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children
and
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make
them learn better manners.
For instance
,
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children
tend to
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become
social and
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make
new friends at
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schools
, who are from a
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different
culture and religion.

To
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summarise
,
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parents
are
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important
in developing a
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child
to understand the fabric of a
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society
, while
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teachers
are of
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help
in
further
shaping of an individual at
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school
. Although,
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teachers
can blend the nature of a
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child
,
still
it is the duty of
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parents
to nurture a
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child
to cope up with the
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society
.
Therefore
, those
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children
with
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good
upbringing can
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become
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good
civilians of the
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society
.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. v. 22

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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