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Some people say that excessive noise should be a criminal offence. While other say that they should be free to make noise without limitation. v.2

Some people say that excessive noise should be a criminal offence. While other say that they should be free to make noise without limitation. v. 2
It argued that making excess noise should be categorised as a criminal offense, whilst others perceive that people should be permitted to make any noise they want. This essay will discuss both of the arguments and state my own opinion. The most obvious logic of making noise pollution a punishable offence is the adverse effect it has on put health. it is responsible for anxiety, sleep deprivation and other chronic diseases. Apparently, these problems may not look like a serious health concern, but these health conditions are the onset of many other diseases. In other words, these tolerable health issues of today may bring more serious health problems tomorrow. Furthermore, the effect of sound is more acute for infants and elderly people, because they are physically incapable of withstanding excessive noise. For example, a recent research revealed that excess noise, especially in big cities are responsible for numerous types of health issues at later part of our lives. This example exemplifies that noise has a long term effect on our health. Therefore, when something is directly impacting our lives should be prevented at any cost. On the other hand, it is true that noise is not good for our health, but we cannot ignore the fact that we cannot live our lives noise free. That is to say that if we try to eliminate sound totally from our lives, that would not be possible. For instance, horns of the cars are a major sound polluter; it will not be possible to make it a punishable offence, because for most developing countries do not follow traffic rules properly, and using horn unavoidable. Thus, seemingly it looks like we cannot make this as a criminal offense without creating a clear cut solution for the problem. In conclusion, it is undeniable that noise cannot be eradicated because we do not have a straight forward solution for this. However, as this issue is related to our health, it should be a criminal offense. It may not give us a complete solution, but it will surely bring the effect down.
It argued that making excess
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noise
should be
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categorised
as a criminal offense, whilst others perceive that
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people
should
be permitted
to
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make
any
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noise
they want. This essay will discuss both of the arguments and state my
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own
opinion.

The most obvious logic of making
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noise
pollution a punishable
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offence
is the adverse
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effect
it has on put
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health
.
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it
is responsible for anxiety, sleep deprivation and
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other
chronic diseases.
Apparently
, these problems may not look like a serious
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health
concern,
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but
these
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health
conditions are the onset of
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many
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other
diseases. In
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other
words, these tolerable
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health
issues of
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today
may bring more serious
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health
problems tomorrow.
Furthermore
, the
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effect
of sound is more acute for infants and elderly
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people
,
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because
they are
physically
incapable of withstanding excessive
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noise
.
For example
, a recent research revealed that excess
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noise
,
especially
in
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big
cities are responsible for numerous types of
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health
issues at later part of our
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lives
. This example exemplifies that
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noise
has a long term
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effect
on our
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health
.
Therefore
, when something is
directly
impacting our
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lives
should be
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prevented
at any cost.

On the
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other
hand, it is true that
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noise
is not
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good
for our
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health
,
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but
we cannot
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ignore
the fact that we cannot
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live
our
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lives
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noise
free.
That is
to say that if we try to eliminate sound
totally
from our
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lives
, that would not be possible.
For instance
, horns of the cars are a major sound polluter; it will not be possible to
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make
it a punishable
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offence
,
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because
for most
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developing countries
do not follow traffic
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rules
properly
, and using horn unavoidable.
Thus
,
seemingly
it looks like we cannot
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make
this as a criminal offense without creating a
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clear
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cut
solution for the problem.

In conclusion
, it is undeniable that
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noise
cannot
be eradicated
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because
we do not have a straight forward solution for this.
However
, as this issue
is related
to our
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health
, it should be a criminal offense. It may not give us a complete solution,
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but
it will
surely
bring the
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effect
down.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that excessive noise should be a criminal offence. While other say that they should be free to make noise without limitation. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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