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Some people say that excessive noise should be a criminal offence. While other say that they should be free to make noise without limitation. v.1

Some people say that excessive noise should be a criminal offence. While other say that they should be free to make noise without limitation. v. 1
It is argued that making a change in an environment could only be done by big organizations and authorities while the citizens has little or no role to play in improving their surroundings. Personally, I tend to disagree with this view because individuals ensure cleanliness of the environment and also pay their taxes regularly to keep the economy running effectively. Some people opine that governments and big companies are solely responsible in protecting the environment. Perhaps this is because the officials provide infrastructure amenities such as good road networks, the creation of schools and hospitals, which will help to improve the lives of the populace. For instance, having a standard medical facility might help to combat unwanted diseases and germs in the environment. Companies, however, might help to create more jobs to reduce unemployment rate in the country. For example, a well known business tycoon in Nigeria, Aliko Dangote, opened his refinery and was able to employ more citizens of the country. This has helped to reduce the high rate of unemployment. So, these could be the reasons for this school of thought. However, I do not support that individuals have little or no role to play in improving the environment. Even though governments has its role to play, every individual should probably have numerous ways on how to improve the environment and also make it habitable for them. Firstly, they should ensure regular cleaning of their surroundings, because they have direct contact with it. This might help to eliminate diseases or an epidemic outbreak from the environment due to the inability of the viruses or pathogens to strive in a clean environment. In addition, in order to reduce air pollution, individuals can curb their use of fossil fuels in household equipment and automotive. Unless we invest in renewable energy from solar, water or wind power, global warming might have a significant impact on our planet. So, these are the reasons why I believe individuals have a role to play in their environments. In conclusion, while government sector and huge industries protect their environment by creating jobs and ensuring good amenities are available, it is logical to say that the populace of its environs should be actively involved to ensure cleanliness of the surrounding.
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only
be done
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big
organizations and authorities while the citizens has
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little
or no
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role
to
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play
in improving their surroundings.
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, I tend to disagree with this view
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because
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individuals
ensure cleanliness of the
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environment
and
also
pay their taxes
regularly
to
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keep
the economy running
effectively
.

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people
opine that
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governments
and
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big
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companies
are
solely
responsible in protecting the
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environment
. Perhaps this is
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because
the officials provide infrastructure amenities such as
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good
road networks, the creation of schools and hospitals, which will
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help
to
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improve
the
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lives
of the populace.
For instance
, having a standard medical facility
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might
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help
to combat unwanted diseases and germs in the
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environment
.
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Companies
,
however
,
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might
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help
to create more jobs to
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reduce
unemployment rate in the country.
For example
, a well known business tycoon in Nigeria,
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Aliko
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Dangote
, opened his refinery and was able to employ more citizens of the country. This has
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helped
to
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reduce
the high rate of unemployment.
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So
, these could be the reasons for this school of
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thought
.

However
, I do not support that
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individuals
have
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little
or no
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role
to
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play
in improving the
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environment
.
Even though
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governments
has its
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role
to
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play
, every
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individual
should
probably
have numerous ways on how to
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improve
the
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environment
and
also
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make
it habitable for them.
Firstly
, they should ensure regular cleaning of their surroundings,
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because
they have direct contact with it. This
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might
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help
to eliminate diseases or an epidemic outbreak from the
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environment
due to the inability of the viruses or pathogens to strive in a clean
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environment
.
In addition
, in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
air pollution,
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individuals
can curb their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of fossil fuels in household equipment and automotive. Unless we invest in renewable energy from solar, water or wind power, global warming
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might
have a significant impact on our planet.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, these are the reasons why I believe
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individuals
have a
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role
to
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play
in their environments.

In conclusion
, while
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government
sector and huge industries protect their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
by creating jobs and ensuring
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
amenities are available, it is logical to say that the populace of its environs should be
actively
involved to ensure cleanliness of the surrounding.
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IELTS essay Some people say that excessive noise should be a criminal offence. While other say that they should be free to make noise without limitation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
374 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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