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Some people say that every human being can create art (e. g. painting), others think only the people born with the ability can create art. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people say that every human being can create art (e. g. painting), others think only the people born with the ability can create art. v. 1
It is generally claimed that art is an inherent characteristic of an individual. However, the common belief is that “Noting is impossible”. Some individuals opine that one can develop skills for interested area by learning, whereas others have an opposite view. The essay shall look into both sides of the debate before forming an opinion. On one side, the human being has the power to develop the skills of their interested area. Although people born with the ability can create art, every individual on the earth can develop art skills such as painting, sculpture by enrolling themselves into a coaching of that field. For instance, many popular artists awarded as national or international champions do not have the inherent artistic skill but they learned the things and develop it. What is more, are living in modern world calling as a global village, where we can get easy access of every object in order to create a craft. For example, in the ancient time individual who have inbuilt characteristics to make sculpture can think for the same while opposite common people cannot think to make sculpture due to unavailability of resources. On the other side, human with the capability to develop art from birth has the additional advantage of that skill as compared to common man. This kind of human can make more efficient art with less difficulty while the common man must perform that task with more efforts. In conclusion, to prove the statement “nothing is impossible”, everybody can grow themselves for interested art. However, the inborn art ability has supplementary benefit to create art efficiently. In my opinion, I agree with formal view.
It is
generally
claimed that
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art
is an inherent characteristic of an
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individual
.
However
, the
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common
belief is that “Noting is impossible”.
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Some
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individuals
opine that one can
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develop
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skills
for interested area by learning, whereas others have an opposite view. The essay shall look into both sides of the debate
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before
forming an opinion.

On one side, the human being has the power to
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develop
the
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skills
of their interested area. Although
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people
born with the ability can create
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art
, every
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individual
on the earth can
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develop
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art
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skills
such as painting, sculpture by enrolling themselves into a coaching of that field.
For instance
,
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many
popular artists awarded as national or international champions do not have the inherent artistic
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skill
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but
they learned the things and
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develop
it.
What is more
, are living in modern world calling as a global village, where we can
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get
easy access of every object in order to create a craft.
For example
, in the ancient time
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individual
who have inbuilt characteristics to
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make
sculpture can
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think
for the same while opposite
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common
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people
cannot
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think
to
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make
sculpture due to unavailability of resources.

On the other side, human with the capability to
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develop
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art
from birth has the additional advantage of that
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skill
as compared to
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common
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man
. This kind of human can
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make
more efficient
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art
with less difficulty while the
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common
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man
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must
perform that task with more efforts.

In conclusion
, to prove the statement “nothing is impossible”, everybody can grow themselves for interested
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art
.
However
, the inborn
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art
ability has supplementary benefit to create
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art
efficiently
. In my opinion, I
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agree
with formal view.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Some people say that every human being can create art (e. g. painting), others think only the people born with the ability can create art. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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