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some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. v. 1
People have different views whether economic growth is merely one way to reduce hunger and pverty or it is main cause to spoil the environment. While some people consider that environment is being spoiled by rising economy and it should definately stop, I am with those who say that hunger and stagerness can only be stopped by economic growth. To commence with, there are myriad reasons why masses believe that econmoic growth is major cause to spoil the environment so it ought be prohibited. Te prominent reason of this is advancement of technology in terms of transport. This is because, thesedays, due to advnet of technology, every person has personal mode of transport such as cars and bikes. They always use them for travelling or even short distances, in other words, individuals are totally depend on these things. Since these things emit harmfull gases, it will pollute the environment. To examplify, USA is world top most country which has highest economic growth and development is respects of transportation as during the survey scientists witnessed that USA is one of the that nations which creates 70% of pollution in every month. Consequently, in order to protect the environment steps need to be put by authorities. I along with those who say that merely way to end the hunger and poverty is the growth of economy. I the contemporary world, most of the developing countries which are facing the hunger and poverty mences, owing to unemployment. and literacy rate. This is because people are unable to earn the money for fulfilling their bsic needs and, therefore they have to confront the hungerness nad also due to this, people remain uder the poverty line. For example, mpst of north koreans are facing hungerness and poverty problems as the economy rate is the lower. Eventually, if people get more job opportunities ans better education it will definately help to end hunger and poverty. To conclude, even though economic growth is main cause to spoil the environment by pollution, I believe that economic growth can assist people to earn money for decreasing their poverty and hungerness.
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pverty
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environment
. While
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some
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people
consider that
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is
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definately
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, I am with those who say that
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hunger
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stagerness
can
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only
be
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stopped
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economic
growth.

To commence with, there are myriad reasons why masses believe that
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econmoic
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growth
is major cause to spoil the
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environment
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so
it ought
be prohibited
. Te prominent reason of this is advancement of technology in terms of transport. This is
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because
,
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thesedays
, due to
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advnet
of technology, every person has personal mode of transport such as cars and bikes. They always
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use
them for travelling or even short distances,
in other words
, individuals are
totally
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depend
on these things. Since these things emit
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harmfull
gases, it will pollute the
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environment
. To
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examplify
, USA is world top most country which has
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highest
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economic
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growth
and development is respects of transportation as during the survey scientists witnessed that USA is one of the that nations which creates 70% of pollution in every month.
Consequently
, in order to protect the
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environment
steps need to
be put
by authorities.

I along with those who say that
merely
way to
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end
the
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hunger
and
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poverty
is the
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growth
of economy.
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I
the contemporary world, most of the
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developing countries
which are facing the
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hunger
and
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poverty
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mences
, owing to unemployment.
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and
literacy rate. This is
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because
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people
are unable to earn the money for fulfilling their
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bsic
needs and,
therefore
they
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hungerness
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nad
also
due to this,
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people
remain
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the
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poverty
line.
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,
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mpst
of north
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koreans
are facing
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hungerness
and
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poverty
problems as the economy rate is the lower.
Eventually
, if
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people
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get
more job opportunities ans better education it will
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definately
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help
to
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end
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hunger
and poverty.

To conclude
,
even though
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economic
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growth
is main cause to spoil the
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environment
by pollution, I believe that
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economic
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growth
can assist
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people
to earn money for decreasing their
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poverty
and
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hungerness
.
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33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Mistakes
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IELTS essay some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. v. 1

Essay
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