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Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.6

Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 6
Some people think that modern constructions are disagreeable and look like a disrupted place in a town, particularly when these buildings are very different from other constructions that are located around them whilst others are of the opinion they add unrepeatable beauty and variety for the town. I think there is some truth in both views and reasons will be given below. Modern buildings such as the Eiffel tower or Princes tower can be appealed as well as can attract people around the world and citizens from many countries of the earth may spend their time interestingly in these places. Modern constructions never lose their crucial importance, that’s why the government may earn a large amount of money from visiting strangers to contemporary places in the country. Moreover these places can be known as a symbol of the country. One example that springs to my mind is the Eiffel tower, which is the symbol of France attracts 5. 5 million strangers in per year from all sides of the world, so government can earn a great deal of money from visiting tourists. On the other hand, many of the modern constructions were built urgently. So they lose the town’s attractiveness as well as beauty. For instance the Elephant Building that is located in Bangkok was thought to become the most attractive place of the country. However due to builders’ mistake, it is one of the ugliest buildings around the world. I think it was a waste a lot of money on building unnecessary construction. To sum up, modern constructions play a key role in earning money for the government if it is not built by mistake.
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modern
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constructions
are disagreeable and look like a disrupted
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place
in a town,
particularly
when these
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buildings
are
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very
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different
from other
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constructions
that
are located
around them whilst others are of the opinion they
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add
unrepeatable beauty and variety for the town. I
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think
there is
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some
truth in both views and reasons will be
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given
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Modern
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buildings
such as the
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Eiffel tower
or Princes tower can
be appealed
as well
as can attract
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people
around the world and citizens from
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many
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countries
of the earth may spend their time
interestingly
in these
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places
.
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Modern
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constructions
never lose their crucial importance, that’s why the
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government
may earn a large amount of
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money
from visiting strangers to contemporary
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places
in the
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country
.
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these
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places
can
be known
as a symbol of the
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country
. One example that springs to my mind is the
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Eiffel tower
, which is the symbol of France attracts 5. 5 million strangers in per year from all sides of the world,
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so
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government
can earn a great deal of
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money
from visiting tourists.

On the other hand
,
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many
of the
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modern
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constructions
were built
urgently
.
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they lose the town’s attractiveness
as well
as beauty.
For instance
the Elephant
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that
is located
in Bangkok was
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thought
to become the most attractive
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place
of the
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country
.
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However
due to builders’ mistake, it is one of the ugliest
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buildings
around the world. I
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think
it was a waste
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a lot of
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money
on
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building
unnecessary construction.

To sum up,
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modern
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constructions
play a key role in earning
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money
for the
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government
if it is not built by mistake.
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IELTS essay Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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