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Some people say that children no longer need to develop handwriting skills, others believe that handwriting is still important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people say that children no longer need to develop handwriting skills, others believe that handwriting is still important. v. 2
In our modern world, in all walks of life, people are judged by their handwriting writing a letter, completing a form at the bank, filling out immigration forms, Jotting down a shopping list…. handwriting is part of our daily lives. some may say that there is no need to having a good skills of handwriting; however, others, included myself agree that having good skills of handwriting and developing it is necessary in our life. Now the question is: is it really important to leran and develop handwriting skills for children? On the one hand, those who believe that expanding skills of handwriting specially for children is not essential they have their own reasons. they say that nowadays our life is surrounded by technology and in some fields like handwriting, we don’t need the old methods instead we should learn and develop new methods like typing with computers keyboards. they say for example, today most of peoples use e-mails and social media instead of old methods of paper based mails. On the other had, I personally believe that having a good hadwriting as important as other skills. In the following I try to point out some significent virtues of handwriting. first of all, handwriting activates the brain more than keyboarding because it involves more complex motor and cognitive skills. Scondly, children who experience difficulty mastering handwriting may avoid writing and produce poor written work. children with poor handwriting will find it hard to proof read their own work. they will then fail to spot their mistakes and their confidence may dip even lower. And finally, when we reach adulthood, it feels more, having a good handwriting. If we’re trying to get a job, good writing skills make us more desirable to the employer. one of the first things an employer looks at is; how is the cover letter or resume. in conclusion, i personally believe that, despite new technologies in many fields, still having good hand writing plays an important role in our daily life and children, students, teachers, lecturers, parents feel happy, confident and inspired by good handwriting skills.
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are judged
by their
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a letter, completing a form at the bank, filling out immigration forms, Jotting down a shopping list….
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handwriting
is part of our daily
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.
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some
may say that there is no need to
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having
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good
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skills
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handwriting
;
however
, others, included myself
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agree
that
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having
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good
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skills
of
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handwriting
and developing it is necessary in our life.

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the question is: is it
really
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important
to
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leran
and develop
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handwriting
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skills
for children?

On the one hand, those who believe that expanding
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skills
of
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handwriting
specially
for
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children
is not essential they have their
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own
reasons.
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they
say that nowadays our life
is surrounded
by technology and in
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some
fields like
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handwriting
, we don’t need the
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old
methods
instead
we should learn and develop new methods like typing with computers keyboards.
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say
for example
,
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today
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most of peoples
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use
e-mails and social media
instead
of
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old
methods of paper based mails.

On the other had, I
personally
believe that
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having
a
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good
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hadwriting
as
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important
as other
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skills
. In the following I try to point out
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some
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significent
virtues of
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handwriting
.
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first of all
,
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handwriting
activates the brain more than keyboarding
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because
it involves more complex motor and cognitive
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skills
.
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Scondly
,
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children
who experience difficulty mastering
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handwriting
may avoid
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writing
and produce poor written work.
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children
with poor
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handwriting
will find it
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to
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proof read
their
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own
work.
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they
will then fail to spot their mistakes and their confidence may dip even lower. And
finally
, when we reach adulthood, it feels more,
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having
a
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good
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handwriting
. If we’re trying to
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get
a job,
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good
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writing
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skills
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make
us more desirable to the employer.
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one
of the
first
things an employer looks at is; how is the cover letter or resume.

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in
conclusion,
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personally
believe that, despite new technologies in
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many
fields,
still
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having
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good
hand
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writing
plays an
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important
role in our daily life and
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children
, students, teachers, lecturers, parents feel happy, confident and inspired by
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good
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handwriting
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skills
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that children no longer need to develop handwriting skills, others believe that handwriting is still important. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
349 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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