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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.8

The feeling of joy and happiness when there is a raise in salary is held dear and wanted by every individual in every nook and corner of the world. Every work done in the modern world needs to be appreciated, which could be in the form of money, promotion, or a special privilege. Many individuals constantly feel that they are under-appreciated for the effort they had taken and envy those who in their eyes are overappreciated for the work they do. In the very same way, certain individuals feel that a few people earn exorbitant salaries, which is good for the country, whereas the rest criticize that the government must enforce an individual to earn a salary only below a certain limit. Earning high salaries is an indication of power and authority. The people who receive a high salary indirectly indicate that the position they hold has a lot of responsibility. These positions might be of a CEO or president or a minister or a board member. All individuals who hold key positions and posts in any field may it be corporate or government, have a high income. It is an appreciation and indirect motivation for the work they have to undertake under that position. In the light of some individuals who ask governments to restrict people to have a high income might seem just the ideal way to maintain equality. By making wealth evenly distributed we bring equality in the society which is a must in the modern world. Capping high salaries also reduce corruption by preventing the rich from gaining unfair control over certain aspects of society. If the salaries were brought to such a level where a person in a top IT company receives just 30% more in salary as that of plumber or carpenter then the competition for jobs would be less and people would respect each type of job. In conclusion, Government should set a certain limit above which salaries should not be given, as it brings equality and justice to our society and also reduces corruption. By enforcing such law we fulfill the wishes and dreams of our ancestors and live in a world where the son of a cobbler and the son of a minister would finally sit together at the table of brotherhood.
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needs to
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overappreciated
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feel that a few
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earn exorbitant
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, which is
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for the country, whereas the rest criticize that the
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Earning
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is an indication of power and authority. The
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people
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receive a
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responsibility. These positions might be of a CEO or president or a minister or a board member.

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, have a
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high
income. It is an appreciation and indirect motivation for the work they
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undertake under that position.

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ask
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to restrict
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income
might seem
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the ideal way to maintain equality. By making wealth
evenly
distributed we bring equality in the society which is a
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must
in the modern
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. Capping
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high
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also
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reduce
corruption by preventing the rich from gaining unfair control over
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certain
aspects of society. If the
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were brought
to such a level where a person in a top IT
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receives
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30% more in
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as that of plumber or carpenter then the competition for jobs would be less and
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people
would respect each type of job.

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,
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Government
should set a
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certain
limit above which
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salaries
should not be
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given
, as it brings equality and justice to our society and
also
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reduces
corruption. By enforcing such law we fulfill the wishes and dreams of our ancestors and
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live
in a
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world
where the son of a cobbler and the son of a minister would
finally
sit together at the table of brotherhood.
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IELTS essay In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level.

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