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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. v.43

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. v. 43
Promotion of new products is appealing to customers. People watch them in electronic media and in newspapers and feel that it will be useful for their needs. On the other hand, we often waste our money and time after observing fascinating advertisement. In my opinion, it is useful for market trends. The advertisement has multidimensional impacts on economics and society, its benefits overweight disadvantages. Most of the people do not like the monotonous life. They keep on changing their surroundings and personality. The requirement of humans changes with their ages. The advertisement is the method to introduce new products to people. Every person is busy in his day to day routine and they do not have enough time to wonder in shops and malls. Moreover through different media, one can see his favourite models in a good mood for describing the advantages of products. Few media heads do not keep an eye over the validity of the information given in the description of promotion. Young people like their heroes like mentors and follow their footprints. In third world countries, health hazard products like cigarette are being advertised.   As a result, man will buy the things which he does not need currently.   These new purchase will be made at the cost of many other useful objects which he may be requiring actually. In conclusion, advertisements are very useful for boosting the economy and it helps people to seek accurate products. A government should maintain the standard of promoting the products and injurious things must be banned on media.
Promotion of new
products
is appealing to customers.
People
watch
them in electronic
media
and in newspapers and feel that it will be
useful
for their needs.
On the other hand
, we
often
waste our money and time after observing fascinating
advertisement
. In my opinion, it is
useful
for market trends. The
advertisement
has multidimensional impacts on economics and society, its benefits overweight disadvantages.

Most of the
people
do not like the monotonous life. They
keep
on changing their surroundings and personality. The requirement of humans
changes
with their ages. The
advertisement
is the method to introduce new
products
to
people
. Every person is busy in his
day to day
routine and
they do not have
enough
time to wonder in shops and malls.
Moreover
through
different
media
, one can
see
his
favourite
models in a
good
mood for describing the advantages of products.

Few
media
heads do not
keep
an eye over the validity of the information
given
in the description of promotion. Young
people
like their heroes like mentors and follow their footprints. In third world countries, health hazard
products
like cigarette are
being advertised
.
 
As a result
,
man
will
buy
the things which he does not need
currently
.
 
These new
purchase
will
be made
at the cost of
many
other
useful
objects which he may be requiring actually.

In conclusion
,
advertisements
are
very
useful
for boosting the economy and it
helps
people
to seek accurate
products
. A
government
should maintain the standard of promoting the
products
and injurious things
must
be banned
on
media
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. v. 43

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
5.5
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