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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. v.42

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. v. 42
I agree with the viewpoint that “advertising anchorages us to buy things that we really do not need. ” Another word for advertisement is ‘a tool of marketing strategy’. To introduce their product or services or to promote their product or services this advertisement will highly useful. If we have never seen an advertisement of a product and first time see that product in the market, we never want to buy. That is, we do not like to just try. If we have already seen that product in the advertisement, we may want to buy it and see how it works. That is by seeing an advertisement over and over again, we indirectly become familiar with that product before we buy and use it. To make us familiar with the products, the product owners make sure we watch their  advertisements again and again. In the advertisement, they show only the advantages of the product. That is an advantage for the marketers, but a disadvantage for the customers. While the marketing people encourage us to buy the things, we need to identify its disadvantages only after experiencing the product or services. Some products are really essential for our life while some are not at all essential. Sometimes we purchase products that are optional for us. We may experience a new detergent powder since it was telecasted several times.   This is the insisting part of advertisements on customers’ mind. Each customer is different. All are not same. Same product will not convince all the public. Some products target children, kinder joy, chocolates, toys, cartoon products and etc. Even though parents know that a product is not good for their children, but they are insisted in buying the product by the children. Children get attracted to a product after  they see the advertisement on television. Finally, I would conclude, that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need.
I
agree
with the viewpoint that “advertising anchorages us to
buy
things that we
really
do not need. ” Another word for
advertisement
is ‘a tool of marketing strategy’. To introduce their
product
or services or to promote their
product
or services this
advertisement
will
highly
useful.

If we have never
seen
an
advertisement of
a
product
and
first
time
see
that
product
in the market, we never want to
buy
.
That is
, we do not like to
just
try. If we have already
seen
that
product
in the
advertisement
, we may want to
buy
it and
see
how it works.
That is
by seeing an
advertisement
over and over again, we
indirectly
become familiar with that
product
before
we
buy
and
use
it. To
make
us familiar with the
products
, the
product
owners
make
sure we
watch
their
 
advertisements
again and again.

In the
advertisement
, they
show
only
the advantages of the
product
.
That is
an advantage for the marketers,
but
a disadvantage for the customers. While the marketing
people
encourage us to
buy
the things, we need to identify its disadvantages
only
after experiencing the
product
or services.

Some
products
are
really
essential for our life while
some
are not at all essential.
Sometimes
we
purchase
products
that are optional for us. We may experience a new detergent powder since it was
telecasted
several times.
 
This is the insisting part of
advertisements
on customers’ mind.

Each customer is
different
. All are not same. Same
product
will not convince all the public.
Some
products
target
children
, kinder joy, chocolates, toys, cartoon
products
and etc
.
Even though
parents know that a
product
is not
good
for their
children
,
but
they
are insisted
in buying the
product
by the
children
.
Children
get
attracted to a
product
after
 
they
see
the
advertisement
on television.
Finally
, I would conclude, that advertising encourages us to
buy
things that we
really
do not need.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. v. 42

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
320 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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