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Some people say that a car is the best way to travel in cities while others believe a bicycle is a better way to commute. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people say that a car is the best way to travel in cities while others believe a bicycle is a better way to commute. v. 2
It is considered by some people that the automobile is the best type of transportation to move in the city while others believe that bike can be a good replacement to the car. In my opinion, cars are most preferable type of transportation in the city. This essay will discuss both points of view. Firstly, when you ride a bike, you can have a significant results in your diet. Depending on your road style and eating habits, you could easily burn 600 calories for the one long ride. Fitness exercises are well - known, however, you can mix the long ride to the work with the burning calories. For example, people who ride a bicycle claim that they have lost 10 kilograms in 2 months. Moreover, they did not change their eating habits. Secondly, compared to cars, bicycles do not produce any kind of pollutions. While automobiles use the fossil fuels, and as a result, they release a huge number of emissions, bikes require a human power. On the other hand, auto is much safer. Nowadays a lot of people drive a car and it is easy to get damaged, especially if you are on the bicycle. However, the modern cars are endowed with seat belts, airbags and other protective technologies. At the same time, if you use the 2-wheel transport, it is dangerous if you do not wear a special equipment. Another reason to use the auto, it is practiced in all climates and at all times of the day and night. The bike does not allow you to travel in a rainy or snowy weather because it is not made for such conditions while cars are available in every weather. Even though the new types of bikes have the improved wheels, which means you will not slide on the ice and struggle with the dirty, you are still in the open air. In the auto you are in safety and feel yourself comfortable irrespective of the climate. In conclusion, although the bicycle is the great transport that help you to lose weight and does not effect seriously on the environment, I think automobiles are still the best mean of transport in order to travel in the city regardless of the weather and you understand that you are in safety.
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some
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people
that the automobile is the best type of transportation to
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move
in the city while others believe that
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bike
can be a
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good
replacement to the
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car
. In my opinion,
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cars
are
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most
preferable type of transportation in the city. This essay will discuss both points of view.

Firstly
, when you
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ride
a
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bike
, you can have a significant
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results
in your diet. Depending on your road style and eating habits, you could
easily
burn 600 calories for the one long
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ride
. Fitness exercises are well
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-
known,
however
, you can mix the long
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ride
to the work with the burning calories.
For example
,
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people
who
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ride
a
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bicycle
claim that they have lost 10 kilograms in 2 months.
Moreover
, they did not
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change
their eating habits.
Secondly
, compared to
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cars
,
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bicycles
do not produce any kind of pollutions. While automobiles
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use
the fossil fuels, and
as a result
, they release a huge number of emissions,
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bikes
require a human power.

On the other hand
, auto is much safer. Nowadays
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a lot of
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people
drive a
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car
and it is easy to
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get
damaged,
especially
if you are on the
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bicycle
.
However
, the modern
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cars
are endowed
with seat belts, airbags and other protective technologies. At the same time, if you
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use
the 2-wheel transport, it is
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dangerous
if you do not wear
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a special equipment
. Another reason to
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use
the auto, it
is practiced
in all climates and at all times of the day and night. The
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bike
does not
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allow
you to travel in a rainy or snowy weather
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because
it is not made for such conditions while
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cars
are available in every weather.
Even though
the new types of
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bikes
have the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
wheels, which means you will not slide on the ice and struggle with the dirty, you are
still
in the open air. In the auto you are in safety and feel yourself comfortable irrespective of the climate.

In conclusion
, although the
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bicycle
is the great transport that
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help
you to lose weight and does not
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effect
seriously
on the environment, I
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think
automobiles are
still
the best mean of transport in order to travel in the city regardless of the weather and you understand that you are in safety.
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IELTS essay Some people say that a car is the best way to travel in cities while others believe a bicycle is a better way to commute. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
381 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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