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News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. Whats is your opinion about this? v.29

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. Whats is your opinion about this? v. 29
Some people argue that impact of photos which are annexed by news stories on TV programs and in newspapers are more than words. Personally, I believe that the pictures convey loads of information and also intention for people and I partially agree with this issue. The truth is that, the pictures are very operational and can have an impress on people‘s mindset. In fact, photos are the best choice in order to introduce and denote something for a person due to the fact that they are like a reminder and can penetrate in our thoughts. What is more, news stories with photos are very attractive and can charm people watch them. Furthermore, some people would like to become aware of news with more details, such as news of theft without a photo or video is not effective. Moreover, through this method people can imagine themselves in their stories. On the other hand, I think that some news does not need to have pictures. In other words, these news have eligibility for lookers on without excess info. The words are sufficient in some situations and also it is not essential to accompany all news with pictures because some people are blind or may not like to read or watch the news with photos, in fact, they are very traditional and are not looking forward for the pictures and they concentrate more on photos than other things. Besides, some news without these pictures can be like a crux for people and breathtaking. In conclusion, I have the opinion that this method would be advantageous and also impressive in most situations, but it is not not vital and news stories without photos are not problematic.
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stories on TV programs and in newspapers are more than words.
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pictures
convey loads of information and
also
intention for
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and I
partially
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operational and can have an impress on
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people‘s
mindset. In fact,
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photos
are the best choice in order to introduce and denote something for a person due to the fact that they are like a reminder and can penetrate in our thoughts.
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,
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news
stories with
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photos
are
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attractive and can charm
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people
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with more
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, such as
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of theft without a
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photo
or video is not effective.
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can imagine themselves in their stories.

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have eligibility for lookers on without excess info. The words are sufficient in
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, in fact, they are
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pictures and
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than other things.
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without these
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can be like a crux for
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and breathtaking.

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also
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not not
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stories without
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are not problematic.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. Whats is your opinion about this? v. 29

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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