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Some people think that a car is the best way to travel in cities while others believe a bicycle is a better way. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Some people think that a car is the best way to travel in cities while others believe a bicycle is a better way. 1
It is believed that oral communication is more effective than written communication. In my opinion, deciding which one is more powerful than the other depends on certain circumstances. When it comes to situations that require body language and facial expressions, spoken words are better than written ones. Dating is an excellent example of this. It is more important to set up a face-to-face conversation with the person we have feelings for than to sit at home and send text messages. Emotion icons, photos or videos can never replace a real smile or the expression of different feelings during a dinner date. Another thing is that meeting and talking directly with each other helps us to have a better understanding of the person we are communicating with. We can easily guess the true feelings of the person we are talking face to face with through his or her facial expressions and gestures, but we cannot do that just by reading some written text. However, I think that in terms of law and business, written communication is much more important than spoken words. In court, for example, our words might count for nothing if we do not have valid evidence, such as written documents, to support our arguments. Speaking of business, it would be much quicker, more time-saving and more convenient for a company to send emails regarding promotions and sales to a group of targeted customers than to meet and talk with every one of them. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that spoken words are more effective in situations when we need to use our gestures and show emotions, while written communication is preferable in law and business.
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is believed
that oral
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communication
is more effective than
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written
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communication
. In my opinion, deciding which one is more powerful than the other depends on certain circumstances.

When it
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to situations that require body language and facial expressions, spoken words are better than
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written
ones. Dating is an excellent example of this. It is more
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important
to set up a face-to-face conversation with the person we have feelings for than to sit at home and
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send
text messages. Emotion icons, photos or videos can never replace a real smile or the expression of
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different
feelings during a dinner date. Another thing is that meeting and talking
directly
with each other
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helps
us to have a better understanding of the person we are communicating with. We can
easily
guess the true feelings of the person we are talking face to face with through
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his or her
facial expressions and gestures,
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just
by reading
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some
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written
text.

However
, I
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think
that in terms of law and business,
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written
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communication
is much more
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important
than spoken words. In court,
for example
, our words might count for nothing if we do not have valid evidence, such as
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written
documents, to support our arguments. Speaking of business, it would be much quicker, more time-saving and more convenient for a
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company
to
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send
emails regarding promotions and sales to a group of targeted customers than to
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meet
and talk with every one of them.

In conclusion
, for the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that spoken words are more effective in situations when we need to
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use
our gestures and
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show
emotions, while
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written
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
communication
is preferable in law and business.
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The limits of my language mean the limits of my world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay Some people think that a car is the best way to travel in cities while others believe a bicycle is a better way. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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