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Some people say smoking should be banned on public places. To what extent do u agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say smoking should be banned on public places. v. 1
It is believed that smoking should be prohibited in public places because of it is a major reason of the health problems not only smokers, but also anyone who in there. In addition to the governments take the control for stopping smoking indoors. It can be created more healthy area with only this way. This essay suggests about it with the reasons. To begin with, most adults smoke at everywhere in their daily life, whether they are indoor or outdoor. They are addicted to cigarette and they can not end up this harmful habit. Public places like as garden, park, even if streets are full of cigarette trash. The smoker's well-being is not only in danger, and also other people are impacted from detrimental chemicals in the cigarettes, as everybody breath same air. If the governments banned smoking in these places, the number of smokers would be decreased day by day. An event from Turkey is the best example, which was inhibition of smoking on public areas runs and most people appreciated that. Meanwhile, some citizens quitted smoking and they started to advise others. On the other hand, some beliefs say that putting a ban smoking on streets or other common places bother someone's lifestyle. Regardless of this position, the prohibition takes care of the public's health. Everybody deserves fresh air and non-smoking areas, toxicants should not be released to air. It is a significant health issue even if it is stopped. Admittedly, smoking in public places is forbidden and to known, most of the users are cigarette junkies. That is to say, it is very helpful for everybody. By way of conclusion, I agree that smoking in public places is forbidden for mainly public's health. In addition, the governments take some solutions in order to protect it.
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is believed
that
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smoking
should
be prohibited
in
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public
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places
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because
of it is a major reason of the
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health
problems not
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only
smokers,
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but
also
anyone who in there.
In addition
to the
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governments
take the control for stopping
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smoking
indoors. It can
be created
more healthy area with
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only
this way. This essay suggests about it with the reasons.

To
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begin
with, most adults smoke at everywhere in their daily life, whether they are indoor or outdoor. They
are addicted
to
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cigarette and
they can not
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end
up this harmful habit.
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Public
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places
like as garden, park, even if streets are full of
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cigarette
trash. The smoker's well-being is not
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only
in
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danger
, and
also
other
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people
are impacted
from detrimental chemicals in the
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cigarettes
, as everybody breath same air. If the
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governments
banned
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smoking
in these
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places
, the number of smokers would
be decreased
day by day. An
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event
from Turkey is the best example, which was inhibition of
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smoking
on
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public
areas runs and most
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people
appreciated that. Meanwhile,
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some
citizens
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quitted
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smoking and
they
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started
to advise others.

On the other hand
,
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some
beliefs say that putting a ban
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smoking
on streets or other common
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places
bother someone's lifestyle. Regardless of this position, the prohibition takes care of the public's
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health
. Everybody deserves fresh air and non-smoking areas,
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toxicants
should not
be released
to air. It is a significant
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health
issue even if it is
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stopped
.
Admittedly
,
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smoking
in
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public
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places
is forbidden
and to known, most of the users are
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cigarette
junkies.
That is
to say, it is
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very
helpful for everybody.

By way of conclusion, I
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agree
that
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smoking
in
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public
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places
is forbidden
for
mainly
public's
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health
.
In addition
, the
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governments
take
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some
solutions in order to protect it.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say smoking should be banned on public places. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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