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Some people say modern innovations bring lot of problem than benefits? Do you agree or disagree? v.3

Some people say modern innovations bring lot of problem than benefits? v. 3
veryone appreciate the latest discoveries and get benefit out of these. Perhaps, some people believe that modern innovation cause many problems. I think that modern inventions are helping to solve the critical problems of mankind. People who hold the viewpoint of inventions causing problems have some valid points. First of all, many discoveries alter the rule of the nature and disrupt the cycle. There are many discoveries in medical science in last one decade which is changing the laws of nature and god. Creating clone for example using human cell is utterly disruptive for society and its repercussion could not be anticipated. Secondly, few inventions have negative effect on society and people suffer invariably during life time. Discover radioactive elements for mankind solve the few problems but it creates the havoc when used inappropriately. Finally, Innovation makes the people lazy and idle. Nowadays, lots of machines are invented which helps human or replace human for chorus works. Thus, people excessively rely on machines and become lethargic and non-creative. However, other people claim that modern inventions are blessings for human-being. These inventions not only made the life easier but also give new life in few instances. Curing the patients suffering from critical diseases such as cancer, HIV, Ebola etc. completely supports the above point. Furthermore, invention in telecommunication field changed the way people interacted in the past. Now people can communicate and deliver their messages in seconds in any parts of the words. Moreover, internet has added new perspective in individual’s life and now people can get any information they want using internet by using computers from anywhere. To sum up, advantages derived from modern discoveries outweigh the disadvantages. In some cases, there might be some negative effect but if these innovations are used wisely then tremendous of benefits can be made available for mankind.
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appreciate the latest
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discoveries
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benefit out of these. Perhaps,
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some
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people
believe that
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modern
innovation cause
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many
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problems
. I
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think
that
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modern
inventions are helping to solve the critical
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of mankind.

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who hold the viewpoint of inventions causing
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have
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some
valid points.
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First of all
,
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many
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discoveries
alter the
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rule
of the nature and disrupt the cycle. There are
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many
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discoveries
in medical science in last one decade which is changing the laws of nature and god. Creating clone
for example
using human cell is
utterly
disruptive for society and its repercussion could not
be anticipated
.
Secondly
, few inventions have
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negative
effect on society and
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people
suffer
invariably
during
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. Discover radioactive elements for mankind solve the few
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problems
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but
it creates the havoc when
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used
inappropriately
.
Finally
, Innovation
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makes
the
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people
lazy and idle. Nowadays, lots of machines
are invented
which
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helps
human or replace human for chorus works.
Thus
,
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people
excessively
rely on machines and become lethargic and non-creative.

However
, other
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people
claim that
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modern
inventions are blessings for human-being. These inventions not
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only
made the
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life
easier
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also
give new
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life
in few instances. Curing the patients suffering from critical diseases such as cancer, HIV, Ebola etc. completely supports the above point.
Furthermore
, invention in telecommunication field
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changed
the way
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people
interacted in the past.
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Now
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people
can communicate and deliver their messages in seconds in any parts of the words.
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, internet has
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added
new perspective in individual’s
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life
and
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now
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people
can
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get
any information they want using internet by using computers from anywhere.

To sum up, advantages derived from
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modern
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outweigh the disadvantages. In
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cases, there might be
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effect
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if these innovations are
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used
wisely
then tremendous of benefits can
be made
available for mankind.
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IELTS essay Some people say modern innovations bring lot of problem than benefits? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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