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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree? v.5

In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. v. 5
Some countries prefer to single gender school for the education of their pupils. A native of some countries, prefer to send their children to the integrated institutions for their elementary education, because they believe it can affect drastically to their life in the upcoming period. I firmly believe that co-educational institutions are a boon, not only for the healthy future of children, but also for the nation as well. Firstly, pupils who studied in single sex schools, take huge time to get involved in conversation with the opposite gender, the reason behind is, they never experienced public conversation earlier, therefore, pupils do not feel comfortable to speak publicly and get nervous when they have to ask any question or any favor. Moreover, children who get more comfortable in their own group, sometimes behave in improper way with others as few conversations should remain with close people. Most importantly the context of delivery of words should be accurate and proper; otherwise it could hurt the emotions of others or could leave the person embarrassed. The way of using proper words and gesture could develop by studding together. Furthermore, students can learn and observe various things from their peer which are having opposite gender by doing healthy competition. This would lead to developing many traits which will enhance their knowledge and experience in a positive way. They will learn the sensitivity of words and acts that is lucrative for their own healthy future. In short, students who studied in co-educational schools are more disciplined and punctual. In conclusion, students can have many skilled traits by studding together along with students of different age, religion and gender, which is possible by getting enrolled in integrated schools. That will develop the whole nation with the same environment, otherwise single sex school give a different atmosphere to students on the basis of their gender or sex.
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Some
countries prefer to single gender
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school
for the education of their pupils. A native of
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some
countries, prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
their children to the integrated institutions for their elementary education,
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because
they believe it can affect
drastically
to their life in the upcoming period. I
firmly
believe that co-educational institutions are a boon, not
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only
for the healthy future of children,
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but
also
for the nation
as well
.

Firstly
, pupils who studied in single sex
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schools
, take huge time to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
involved in conversation with the opposite gender, the reason behind is, they never experienced public conversation earlier,
therefore
, pupils do not feel comfortable to speak
publicly
and
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get
nervous when they
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have to
ask any question or any favor.
Moreover
, children who
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get
more comfortable in their
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own
group,
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sometimes
behave in improper way with others as few conversations should remain with close
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people
. Most
importantly
the context of delivery of words should be accurate and proper;
otherwise
it could hurt the emotions of others or could
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leave
the person embarrassed. The way of using proper words and gesture could develop by studding together.

Furthermore
,
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students
can learn and observe various things from their peer which are having opposite gender by doing healthy competition. This would lead to developing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
traits which will enhance their knowledge and experience in a
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positive
way. They will learn the sensitivity of words and acts
that is
lucrative for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
healthy future. In short,
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students
who studied in co-educational
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schools
are more disciplined and punctual.

In conclusion
,
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students
can have
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many
skilled traits by studding together along with
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students
of
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different
age, religion and gender, which is possible by getting enrolled in integrated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
. That will develop the whole nation with the same environment,
otherwise
single sex
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
give a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
atmosphere to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
on the basis of their gender or sex.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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