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Some people think that they can go to gym to remain fit, while others think that there aa better ways to do this. Discuss both of views along with your opinion

Some People think the best way to stay fit is by joining a gym/health club while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient. v. 2
Health has played an important role in our life. With passage of time there has been drastic change in our lifestyle which has affected our health mostly in adverse way. In order to maintain our body in healthy position, it is important to do some exercise irrespective of matter whether we do it in gym or at home From ancient times people know that healthy mind resides in a healthy body and due to lack of technology and innovation people usually perform excercise at home. It helped them to keep thier energy level high and helping thier body to perform well ultimately granting them a long life but on the contrary side, due to innovation and passage of time most of people now do not have time to perform excercise due to thier busy life and hectic schedule which results in poor health As we know that we have to do yoga and some other excercise to keep our body fit. But most of the time we find it boring after some time amd lack interest. Moreover our mindset is very much important as nothing can be achieved without determination. We have to mend our habits and also ensure that we maintain our daily routine in such a way that excercise time is also intacted in it. It doesn't matter that we perform excercise at home or at gym but having a fixed time for excercise and performing the same time is very much important To conclude we can say that it depends on us how we maintain our daily schedule which will decide that whether we will live a healthy life or not. To live a healthy life a perfect mindset and fixed time for excercise is needed irrespective of place where we are using it
Health has played an
important
role in our
life
. With passage of
time
there has been drastic
change
in our lifestyle which has
affected
our health
mostly
in adverse way. In order to maintain our
body
in
healthy
position, it is
important
to do
some
exercise irrespective of matter whether we do it in gym or at home

From ancient
times
people
know that
healthy
mind resides in a
healthy
body
and due to lack of technology and innovation
people
usually
perform
excercise
at home. It
helped
them to
keep
thier
energy level high and helping
thier
body
to
perform
well
ultimately
granting them a long
life
but
on the contrary
side, due to innovation and passage of
time
most of
people
now
do not have
time
to
perform
excercise
due to
thier
busy
life
and hectic schedule which results in poor
health


As we know that we
have to
do yoga and
some
other
excercise
to
keep
our
body
fit.
But
most of the
time
we find it boring after
some
time
amd
lack interest.
Moreover
our mindset is
very
much
important
as nothing can
be achieved
without determination. We
have to
mend our habits and
also
ensure that we maintain our daily routine in such a way that
excercise
time
is
also
intacted
in it. It doesn't matter that we
perform
excercise
at home or at gym
but
having a
fixed
time
for
excercise
and performing the same
time
is
very
much
important


To conclude
we can say that it depends on us how we maintain our daily schedule which will decide that whether we will
live
a
healthy
life
or not. To
live
a
healthy
life
a perfect mindset and
fixed
time
for
excercise
is needed
irrespective of place where we are using
it
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IELTS essay Some people think that they can go to gym to remain fit, while others think that there aa better ways to do this. Discuss both of views along with your opinion

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