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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised in the correct place. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised in the correct place. v. 1
It is often believed that keeping a clean and orderly abode and office space is crucial and I strongly agree with this view. I will discuss the reasons why I feel that a person's home and workplace should be neat and organised below. Maintaining a neat home and workplace is relevant for some reasons. One of such reasons is that it is easier to locate things in a tidy and orderly environment. In an orderly environment, every item has a specific location where it is stored neatly and can be easily retrieved when the need arises. For example, I find it very easy to look through my sister's room for any item because she keeps her room orderly and neat. Another reason why I agree that it is crucial for an individual to keep a clean and orderly abode and office space is that people are more attracted to visit tidy places. People are more willing to visit an individual if he has a clean and well-arranged personal environment because people are naturally attracted to cleanliness and orderliness. Furthermore, people are more likely to accept edibles from a person who maintains a hygienic surrounding. For example, a recent survey by the Department of Psychology, Abuja, showed that people are more likely comfortable frequenting a place because it is tidy and well-arranged. In conclusion, it is crucial to maintain a clean and orderly personal space because it makes it easier for a person to locate his things. In addition, people are naturally attracted to clean places.
It is
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often
believed that keeping a
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clean
and
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orderly
abode and office space is crucial and I
strongly
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agree
with this view. I will discuss the
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reasons
why I feel that a person's home and workplace should be neat and
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organised
below.

Maintaining a neat home and workplace is relevant for
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some
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reasons
. One of such
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reasons
is that it is easier to locate things in a tidy and
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orderly
environment. In an
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orderly
environment, every item has a specific location where it
is stored
neatly
and can be
easily
retrieved when the need arises.
For example
, I find it
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very
easy to look through my sister's room for any item
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because
she
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keeps
her room
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orderly
and neat.

Another
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reason
why I
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agree
that it is crucial for an individual to
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keep
a
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clean
and
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orderly
abode and office space is that
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people
are more attracted to visit tidy places.
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People
are more willing to visit an individual if he has a
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clean
and well-arranged personal environment
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because
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people
are
naturally
attracted to cleanliness and orderliness.
Furthermore
,
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people
are more likely to accept edibles from a person who maintains a hygienic surrounding.
For example
, a recent survey by the Department of Psychology, Abuja,
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showed
that
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people
are more likely comfortable frequenting a place
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because
it is tidy and well-arranged.

In conclusion
, it is crucial to maintain a
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clean
and
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orderly
personal space
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because
it
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makes
it easier for a person to locate his things.
In addition
,
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people
are
naturally
attracted to
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clean
places.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised in the correct place. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
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