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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. Do you agree or disagree. v.10

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. v. 10
According to some people, cleaning and organising the things in houses and offices is essential. I agree with the argument as we feel more pleasant when we see our clean our house, and furniture items look amazing if it places in an organised way. On the one hand, Keeping our home or organisation neat and tidy will makes us comfortable because the messy surroundings distract or distress people. If things are not kept in the right place, we will have to waste much time searching for them. For example, many people consume their time when they lost their valuable household articles such as keys, clothes, and gadgets. If people keep the object in the correct position where they comforted to find out, it can be saved their time and energy. On the other hand, all items kept in a way in our house and office that everyone feels relaxing when they see the items. This means that we need to clean the article regularly and change the item if it is broken. As a result, it is the duty of each member who lives in the house to keep the household objects neat and clean, and it is essential to keep things properly. To illustrate, a friend of mine organised books on the shelf, and he decorates his bookshelf in the way as it looks astonishing so that it is easy to find the book as all books keep at the proper place. To conclude, I believe that it is vital to organise various things in the correct place as an organisation helps to find items quickly.
According to
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some
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people
, cleaning and
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organising
the things in
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houses
and offices is essential. I
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agree
with the argument as we feel more pleasant when we
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see
our clean our
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house
, and furniture
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items
look amazing if it
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places
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in an organised way
. On the one hand, Keeping our home or
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organisation
neat and tidy will
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makes
us comfortable
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because
the messy surroundings distract or distress
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people
. If things are not
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kept
in the right
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place
, we will
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have to
waste much time searching for them.
For example
,
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many
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people
consume their time when they lost their valuable household articles such as keys, clothes, and gadgets. If
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people
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keep
the object in the correct position where they comforted to find out, it can
be saved
their time and energy.
On the other hand
, all
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items
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kept
in a way in our
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house
and office that everyone feels relaxing when they
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see
the
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items
. This means that we need to clean the article
regularly
and
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change
the
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item
if it
is broken
.
As a result
, it is the duty of each member who
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lives
in the
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house
to
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keep
the household objects neat and clean, and it is essential to
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keep
things
properly
. To illustrate, a friend of mine
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organised
books on the shelf, and he decorates his bookshelf in the way as it looks astonishing
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so
that it is easy to find the book as all books
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keep
at the proper
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place
.
To conclude
, I believe that it is vital to
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organise
various things in the correct
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place
as an
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organisation
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helps
to find
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items
quickly
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. v. 10

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
267 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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