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Some people say it is important keep your home and your workplace tidy, with organized everything and on a correct place. What is your opinion about this? v.2

Some people say it is important keep your home and your workplace tidy, with organized everything and on a correct place. What is your opinion about this? v. 2
According to some people, organising things and keeping them in their right place both at home and in the office is important. I agree with this opinion to a certain extent, but I also feel that there is no need to keep something that is used often in the correct place. On the one hand, keeping our home and workplace neat and tidy will make us feel comfortable, because messy surroundings distress and distract people. Moreover, if things are not kept in their right place, we will have to waste a lot of time looking for them. For example, many people can recount at least one occasion when they had to spend hours searching for their keys. Had they kept the keys in their right place, they could have saved a lot of time and trouble. Likewise, if important financial and health documents are not kept in the right place, the consequences can be disastrous. In the event of a medical emergency, no one can waste time looking for an important report or prescription. Obviously, there are several benefits of keeping things organized. On the other hand, not everything has to be kept in its right place at all times. Actually, when it comes to things we use frequently, keeping them in a place where we can find them easily is more important than keeping them in their proper place. For example, I enjoy reading. Once I have taken a book from my bookshelf, I put it back only after I have finished reading it. Until then I leave it on my table or in my bed. I find nothing wrong with this arrangement because as long as I can find the book easily, I do not care whether it is in its right place or not. To conclude, I believe that it is important to keep most of things organized and in the correct place, because organization makes it easy to find them. However, certain things that we use often do not have to be in their right place at all times.
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financial and health documents are not
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of a medical emergency, no one can waste
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looking for an
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report or prescription.
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, there are several benefits of keeping things
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organized
.

On the other hand
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at all
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to things we
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where we can
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them
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.
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after I have finished reading it. Until
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then I
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it on my table or in my bed. I
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nothing
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with this arrangement
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the book
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most of things
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organized
and in the correct
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IELTS essay Some people say it is important keep your home and your workplace tidy, with organized everything and on a correct place. What is your opinion about this? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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