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People generally know that the environment is important. However, most individuals still don't take responsibility to protect the environment. Why is this? what should be done to encourage people to protect the environment. Give reasons for your answer or include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. v.3

People generally know that the environment is important. However, most individuals still don't take responsibility to protect the environment. Why is this? what should be done to encourage people to protect the environment. v. 3
An Environment plays an important role in the healthy life by human beings. Despite the fact of the importance of the environment, there are numerous concerns have aroused due to careless human being auctioned for example, deforestation and air pollutions are a few of the reasons to blame it. On the one hand, due to selfishness of human being deforestation has boomed by causing an adverse effect on our environment. To illustrate this point, people cutting forests to construct houses just to accommodate the needs of over population. Although, shelter is important for every human being, the environment should be considered equally. In my view, the Government should give building house permission in an open area, away from the greenery. Research proved that plantation activity in the society has added an awareness of changing environmental issues. But then, air pollution is another cause of environmental issues. Due to the rapid phase of life, every individual seeking advance transportation to commute on a daily basis. For instance, alternatively of walking or pushing on bikes to work people prefer to commute by cars to save time and effort. The Consequent use of motor vehicles has a huge negative impact on the environment. Government authorities should introduce carefree days to on a regular basis instead of annually. Therefore, people get regular practice of avoiding the car usage and replacing it other transportation. Moreover, WHO proved that annual event of the international car free day has highlighted the numerous benefits that included a minimal change of reduction of pollution. In conclusion, deforestation and air pollution are regarded as a cause of environmental issues and people held responsible for it. However, implementing safe measures on a daily basis will minimize the environmental issues.
An
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Environment
plays an
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important
role in the healthy life by
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human
beings. Despite the fact of the importance of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
, there are numerous concerns have aroused due to careless
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human
being auctioned
for example
, deforestation and air pollutions are a few of the reasons to blame it.

On the one hand, due to selfishness of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
being deforestation has boomed by causing an adverse effect on our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
. To illustrate this point,
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people
cutting forests to construct
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
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just
to accommodate the needs of over population. Although, shelter is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
for every
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human
being, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
should
be considered
equally
. In my view, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should give building
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
permission in an open area, away from the greenery. Research proved that plantation activity in the society has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
an awareness of changing
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environmental
issues.

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But
then, air pollution is another cause of
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environmental
issues. Due to the rapid phase of life, every individual seeking advance transportation to commute on a daily basis.
For instance
,
alternatively
of walking or pushing on bikes to work
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people
prefer to commute by cars to save time and effort. The Consequent
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use
of motor vehicles has a huge
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
authorities should introduce carefree days to on a regular basis
instead
of
annually
.
Therefore
,
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
regular practice of avoiding the car usage and replacing it other transportation.
Moreover
, WHO proved that annual
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
of the international car free day has highlighted the numerous benefits that included a minimal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
of reduction of pollution.

In conclusion
, deforestation and air pollution
are regarded
as a cause of
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environmental
issues and
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people
held responsible for it.
However
, implementing safe measures on a daily basis will minimize the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
issues.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay People generally know that the environment is important. However, most individuals still don't take responsibility to protect the environment. Why is this? what should be done to encourage people to protect the environment. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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