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due to increasing density of living areas in a city, most residents are suffering from physical and social dangers. consequently, they are against living in the city. to what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? v.1

due to increasing density of living areas in a city, most residents are suffering from physical and social dangers. consequently, they are against living in the city. with the statement? v. 1
Due to a vast increase in the population in a city, there is a plethora of dangers that face residents physically and socially, so few are against to live in urban areas. I completely agree with the above statement, where it effects on health and the economy. People are more interested in accommodating in availability of high facilities such as, education, employment and other resources. But, there are many disadvantages that will have an effect on health. In high technology city many transport facilities are available, which increase in traffic congestion, and also increase pollution. Due to this it effect on the health of the people who live. For instance, recent survey states that residents in city areas have more health problems such as, lung cancer, heart diseases due to the environmental changes. Additionally, it also effects on mental disturbances due to noise pollution. Furthermore, it also has an impact on the economy. Due to high population expenses are increased and rural people cannot rent a house in a city due to their low income, and cost of the goods they purchase are expensive. For example, a product is very cheap in rural areas than compared to urban areas, which is quite expensive. In addition to this, society is different from village areas, because urban people do not believe in supernatural abilities. Thus, living in well developed area has many negative aspects, and cannot live in an efficient way. To conclude, I completely agree that high populated areas have drawbacks in terms of physical health like diseases, and socially with respect to the economy.
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and
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so
few are against to
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live
in urban
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areas
. I completely
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agree
with the above statement, where it effects on
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health
and the economy.

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People
are more interested in accommodating in availability of
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high
facilities such as, education, employment and other resources.
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But
, there are
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many
disadvantages that will have an
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effect
on
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health
. In
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high
technology city
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many
transport facilities are available, which increase in traffic congestion, and
also
increase pollution.
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Due
to this it
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effect
on the
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health
of the
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people
who
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live
.
For instance
, recent survey states that residents in city
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areas
have more
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health
problems such as, lung cancer, heart diseases
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due
to the environmental
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changes
.
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also
effects on mental disturbances
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due
to noise pollution.

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, it
also
has an impact on the economy.
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to
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high
population expenses
are increased
and rural
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people
cannot rent a
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house
in a city
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due
to their low income, and cost of the
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goods
they
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purchase
are expensive.
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, a product is
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very
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cheap
in rural
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areas
than compared to urban
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areas
, which is quite expensive.
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to this, society is
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different
from village
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areas
,
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because
urban
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people
do not believe in supernatural abilities.
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, living in
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well developed
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area
has
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many
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negative
aspects, and cannot
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live
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in an efficient way
.

To conclude
, I completely
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agree
that
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high
populated
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areas
have drawbacks in terms of physical
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health
like diseases, and
socially
with respect to the economy.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay due to increasing density of living areas in a city, most residents are suffering from physical and social dangers. consequently, they are against living in the city. with the statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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