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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are important than history. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion. v.36

Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are important than history. v. 36
Schools offer education that contributes to a child's development and growth, in such situation, subjects like history to be taught in schools or not has become a sparkling debate. While some think it is crucial to teach past, others, however, argue that STEM subjects should be given priority. This essay will discuss both the points and explain why I believe science and technology should be on top of any other subject. Certainly, those who support educating the ancient culture argue so for the following factors, firstly, they claim that the culture and traditions of a nation must be carried forward, and the only way to do this is by keeping such subjects alive. The Indian culture for instance, is flourishing; it is never burnt out since the government supports a branch of history in education and entertainment both. Another reason for supporting is to understand the patterns of human behaviour and consequences, to elaborate, studying kings and their style of ruling countries will enable current authorities refrain from repeating mistakes of the past. Therefore, for those who give importance to cultures and people around, teaching ancient heritage as a course is justified. Conversely, others, myself included, have two significant reasons to back up the ideology of educating science and technology. The foremost one is to keep children abreast in competition to learn new things to adapt to the speedy changing nature of the present society. Writing code, using tabs and experimenting new things, for example, will enable a child to survive with peers in the upcoming Artifically Intelligent world. Moreover, the organizations hire people with technical knowledge rather than the one who understands history. To prove this argument, a research shows that 80% of employed personals are specialized in either science or technological fields. Overall, It is important to understand our past, but to be competent and keep up with the society, it is always better to look forward and consume the knowledge that will benefit the most to earn and live a standard life instead of focusing on outdated courses.
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be taught
in schools or not has become a sparkling debate. While
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think
it is crucial to teach past, others,
however
, argue that STEM subjects should be
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given
priority. This essay will discuss both the points and
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explain
why I believe science and technology should be on top of any other subject.

Certainly
, those who support educating the ancient
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culture
argue
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for the following factors,
firstly
, they claim that the
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culture
and traditions of a nation
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be carried
forward, and the
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only
way to do this is by keeping such subjects alive. The Indian
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culture
for instance
, is flourishing; it is never burnt out since the
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government
supports a branch of history in education and entertainment both. Another reason for supporting is to understand the patterns of human
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behaviour
and consequences, to elaborate, studying kings and their style of ruling countries will enable
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current
authorities refrain from repeating mistakes of the past.
Therefore
, for those who give importance to
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cultures
and
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people
around, teaching ancient heritage as a course
is justified
.

Conversely
, others, myself included, have two significant reasons to back up the ideology of educating science and technology. The foremost one is to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
children abreast in competition to learn new things to adapt to the speedy changing nature of the present society. Writing code, using tabs and experimenting new things,
for example
, will enable a child to survive with peers in the upcoming
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Artifically
Intelligent world.
Moreover
, the organizations hire
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people
with technical knowledge
rather
than the one who understands history. To prove this argument,
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a research
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shows
that 80% of employed personals
are specialized
in either science or technological fields.

Overall
, It is
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important
to understand our past,
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but
to be competent and
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keep
up with the society, it is always better to look forward and consume the knowledge that will benefit the most to earn and
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live
a standard life
instead
of focusing on outdated courses.
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IELTS essay Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are important than history. v. 36

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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