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Some people say economic development is necessary to reduce the poverty in the world. Others say that economic growth should be stop immediately to stop damaging the environment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.2

Some people say economic development is necessary to reduce the poverty in the world. Others say that economic growth should be stop immediately to stop damaging the environment. v. 2
Economic growth has been a major priority in many parts of the world because some people believe that economic growth is the most effective way to address starvation and poverty while others claim that it would have negative impacts on the environment and should not be continued. On the one hand, solid economic progress is crucial for tackling hunger and poverty. First, a highly developed economy means have considerable investment in agricultural sector. Successful businesses would join hands with government to support modernization and innovation of farming method and techniques. This would help enhance productivity and food security would be assured as a result. Meanwhile, economic prosperity also contribute to significantly reducing the unemployment rate. In other words, the total national outcomes increase, the enterprises would need to expand their operation, thus, creating more job opportunities and decreasing the poverty rate. On the other hand, defining sustainable economy arise from a nation’s friendly- environmental economic progress. Industrialization coupled with economic development has resulted in ever-increasing environmental pollution. Factories pollute the air by releasing gas emissions to the atmosphere on a daily basis, sewage is being discharged into the rivers without adequate pre-treatment. Is businesses show concern in environmental friendly technology, and make optimal use of resources in order to minimize environmentally detrimental effects. In conclusion, the above analysis point out the fact that economic development should be put on top priority in fighting poverty and food shortage and environmental drawbacks can possible be overcome.
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growth has been a major priority in
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many
parts of the world
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because
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some
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people
believe that
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economic
growth is the most effective way to address starvation and
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poverty
while others claim that it would have
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negative
impacts on the environment and should not
be continued
.

On the one hand, solid
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economic
progress is crucial for tackling hunger and
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poverty
.
First
, a
highly
developed economy means have considerable investment in agricultural sector. Successful businesses would
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join
hands with
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government
to support modernization and innovation of farming method and techniques. This would
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help
enhance productivity and food security would
be assured
as a result
. Meanwhile,
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economic
prosperity
also
contribute to
significantly
reducing the unemployment rate.
In other words
, the total national outcomes increase, the enterprises would need to expand their operation,
thus
, creating more job opportunities and decreasing the
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poverty
rate.

On the other hand
, defining sustainable economy arise from a nation’s friendly-
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environmental
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economic
progress. Industrialization coupled with
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economic
development has resulted in ever-increasing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
pollution. Factories pollute the air by releasing gas emissions to the atmosphere on a daily basis, sewage is
being discharged
into the rivers without adequate pre-treatment. Is businesses
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show
concern in
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environmental
friendly technology, and
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make
optimal
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use
of resources in order to minimize
environmentally
detrimental effects.

In conclusion
, the above analysis point out the fact that
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economic
development should
be put
on top priority in fighting
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poverty
and food shortage and
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environmental
drawbacks can possible
be overcome
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say economic development is necessary to reduce the poverty in the world. Others say that economic growth should be stop immediately to stop damaging the environment. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
244 words
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