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Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer. Would you rather be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business? Use specific reasons to explain your choice. v.3

Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer. Would you rather be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business? Use specific reasons to explain your choice. v. 3
Old-age is undoubtedly the most difficult phase of one's life and being able to live it peacefully should be everyone's right. In countries like Britain, the government sometimes takes care of the financial aspects of old-age homes, like paying for the nurses working with aged people. Aging brings along a lot of challenges for a person, which are not limited to being able to move and perform daily tasks on their own but also includes financial burden. They require nurses who can make sure they're provided with professional help. This responsibility, in my opinion should be divided equally between the government and the family. In their prime age, these people provided for their children and family, both financially and personally. They made sure their children were properly washed and fed when they were infants. Now this family, in turn, should also be responsible towards their old parents, in one way or another. For example, in my family, my aunt left her job for her newborn son, whom she was solely responsible for, till the time he went to college. Her son should be thankful for it by taking responsibility of his mother even if she decides to live in an old-age home, either financially or by volunteering his time at that home. I believe, this way both the generations pay their dues to the other one by looking after each other at the age they require assistance. It makes sure that our society is working in the way evolution intended.
Old
-age is
undoubtedly
the most difficult phase of one's life and being able to
live
it
peacefully
should be everyone's right. In countries like Britain, the
government
sometimes
takes care of the financial aspects of
old
-age homes, like paying for the nurses working with aged
people
.

Aging brings along
a lot of
challenges for a person, which are not limited to being able to
move
and perform daily tasks on their
own
but
also
includes financial burden. They require nurses who can
make
sure they're provided with professional
help
. This responsibility, in my opinion should
be divided
equally
between the
government
and the family.

In their prime age, these
people
provided for their children and family, both
financially
and
personally
. They made sure their children were
properly
washed and fed when they were infants.
Now
this family, in turn, should
also
be responsible towards their
old
parents, in one way or another.
For example
, in my family, my aunt
left
her job for her newborn son, whom she was
solely
responsible for, till the time he went to college. Her son should be thankful for it by taking responsibility of his mother even if she decides to
live
in an
old
-age home, either
financially
or by volunteering his time at that home.

I believe, this way both the generations pay their dues to the other one by looking after each other at the age they require assistance. It
makes
sure that our society is working in the way evolution intended.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer. Would you rather be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business? Use specific reasons to explain your choice. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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