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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.5

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. v. 5
There are those who appreciate routine and an orderly life whereas others relish the opportunities for variation and diversity. I do have an understanding of why some people dislike change, but my personal preference is for a degree of unpredictability and the opportunities to escape from my comfort zone. There are undoubted benefits of a degree of routine in our daily lives. A set structure may help us to be more productive and efficient. So, for example, allocating fixed periods of time for work and for relaxation will enable us to get more done whereas a flexible schedule may lead to the formation of bad habits. It could also be argued that a daily routine is better for our mental health. Knowing exactly what we will be doing and when, will reduce the potential for uncertainty and thus reduce our levels of stress. There are, however, a number of disadvantages to a life of routine devoid of any uncertainties. Because of a lack of change we risk becoming bored and we may find less creativity and inspiration in our lives. We need to face new challenges and have fresh goals and objectives otherwise we will not grow and fulfil our potential. The greatest artists, inventors and scientists have always been those who were willing to embrace the unfamiliar and explore the unknown. In conclusion, it may be of comfort to do the same things every day and some people are more efficient if they follow a fixed routine. However, the avoidance of new experiences will inevitably diminish us whereas embracing change enables us to reach our full potential.
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and an orderly life whereas others relish the opportunities for variation and diversity. I do have an understanding of why
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some
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my personal preference is for a degree of unpredictability and the opportunities to escape from my comfort zone.

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are undoubted
benefits of a degree of
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routine
in our daily
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lives
. A set structure may
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help
us to be more productive and efficient.
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,
for example
, allocating
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fixed
periods of time for work and for relaxation will enable us to
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get
more done whereas a flexible schedule may lead to the formation of
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bad
habits. It could
also
be argued
that a daily
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routine
is better for our mental health. Knowing exactly what we will be doing and when, will
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reduce
the potential for uncertainty and
thus
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reduce
our levels of
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stress
.

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however
, a number of disadvantages to a life of
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devoid of any uncertainties.
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of a lack of
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change
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bored and
we may find less creativity and inspiration in our
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lives
. We need to face new challenges and have fresh goals and objectives
otherwise
we will not grow and fulfil our potential. The greatest artists, inventors and scientists have always been those who were willing to embrace the unfamiliar and explore the unknown.

In conclusion
, it may be of comfort to do the same things every day and
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some
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people
are more efficient if they follow a
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fixed
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routine
.
However
, the avoidance of new experiences will
inevitably
diminish us whereas embracing
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change
enables us to reach our full potential.
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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