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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.11

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. v. 11
Over the last half century the pace of change in the life of human beings has increased beyond our wildest expectations. This has been driven by technological and scientific breakthroughs that are changing the whole way we view the world on an almost daily basis. This means that change is not always a personal option, but an inescapable fact of life, and we need to constantly adapt to keep pace with it. Those people who believe they have achieved some security by doing the same, familiar things are living in denial. Even when people believe they are resisting change themselves, they cannot stop the world around them from changing. Sooner or later they will find that the familiar jobs no longer exist, or that the ‘safe’ patterns of behaviour are no longer appropriate. However, reaching the conclusion that change is inevitable is not the same as assuming that ‘change is always for the better’. Unfortunately, it is not always the case that new things are promoted because they have good impacts for the majority of people. A lot of innovations are made with the aim of making money for a few. This is because it is the rich and powerful people in our society who are able to impose changes (such as in working conditions or property developments) - that are in their own interests. In conclusion, I tend to think that change can be stimulating and energising for individuals when they pursue it themselves, but that all change, including that which is imposed on people, does not necessarily have good outcomes.
Over the last half century the pace of
change
in the life of human beings has increased beyond our wildest expectations. This has
been driven
by technological and scientific breakthroughs that are changing the whole way we view the world on an almost daily basis. This means that
change
is not always a personal option,
but
an inescapable fact of life, and we need to
constantly
adapt to
keep
pace with it.

Those
people
who believe they have achieved
some
security by doing the same, familiar things are living in denial. Even when
people
believe they are resisting
change
themselves, they cannot
stop
the world around them from changing. Sooner or later they will find that the familiar jobs no longer exist, or that the ‘safe’ patterns of
behaviour
are no longer appropriate.

However
, reaching the conclusion that
change
is inevitable is not the same as assuming that ‘
change
is always for the better’. Unfortunately, it is not always the case that new things
are promoted
because
they have
good
impacts for the majority of
people
.
A lot of
innovations
are made
with the aim of making money for a few. This is
because
it is the rich and powerful
people
in our society who are able to impose
changes
(such as in working conditions or property developments)
-
that are in their
own
interests.

In conclusion
, I tend to
think
that
change
can be stimulating and
energising
for individuals when they pursue it themselves,
but
that all
change
, including that which
is imposed
on
people
, does not
necessarily
have
good
outcomes.
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
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