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Many museums charge for admission, while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admissions to museums outweigh the disadvantages.

Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admissions to museums outweigh the disadvantages? ” v. 14
Lots of museums charge an entry fee, while others do not. This essay thinks that the drawbacks of charging fees do not outweigh the benefits because although some people are excluded when museums charge admission, museums need the funding. The main disadvantage is that high fees exclude a large proportion of the population, especially in less developed countries. Many people in poorer countries have just enough money for food and shelter and exhibits and museums are one of the few cultural activities they can enjoy free of charge. For example, Egypt has millions of poor people, but also a rich ancient culture and it is important that all the people get to experience these artefacts, not just those that can afford it. But this essay would argue that people with such serious concerns are unlikely to appreciate the arts. However, there are some who say that museums are unsustainable without the money they get from ticket sales. They say that this allows the buildings to remain open and it is better that some people get to see the exhibits, rather than none at all. For instance, in the UK there have been huge government spending cuts over the last few years, and museums have had to rely on entrance fees to stay open. Therefore, it is obvious that without these charges, there would be no museums at all. In conclusion, although it is unfortunate that everyone cannot enjoy the exhibits in a museum, the money earned from charging people to enter is often the only thing that is keeping the doors open
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an entry
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, while others do not. This essay
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that the drawbacks of charging
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fees
do not outweigh the benefits
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although
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some
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people
are excluded
when
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museums
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charge
admission,
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museums
need the funding.

The main disadvantage is that high
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fees
exclude a large proportion of the population,
especially
in less
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developed countries
.
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people
in poorer countries have
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just
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enough
money for food and shelter and exhibits and
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museums
are one of the few cultural activities they can enjoy free of
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charge
.
For example
, Egypt has millions of poor
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people
,
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but
also
a rich ancient culture and it is
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important
that all the
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people
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get
to experience these
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just
those that can afford it.
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this essay would argue that
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people
with such serious concerns are unlikely to appreciate the arts.

However
, there are
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some
who say that
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museums
are unsustainable without the money they
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get
from ticket sales. They say that this
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allows
the buildings to remain open and it is better that
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some
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people
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get
to
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see
the exhibits,
rather
than none at all.
For instance
, in the UK there have been huge
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government
spending
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cuts
over the last few years, and
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museums
have had to rely on entrance
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fees
to stay open.
Therefore
, it is obvious that without these
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charges
, there would be no
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museums
at all.

In conclusion
, although it is unfortunate that everyone cannot enjoy the exhibits in a
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museum
, the money earned from charging
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people
to enter is
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often
the
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only
thing
that is
keeping the doors open
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IELTS essay Many museums charge for admission, while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admissions to museums outweigh the disadvantages.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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