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One of the major problems that faces today’s governments is creating enough satisfactory housing for their increasing populations whilst still trying to protect the environment. Discuss this statement and give your opinion. v.1

One of the major problems that faces today’s governments is creating enough satisfactory housing for their increasing populations whilst still trying to protect the environment. Discuss this statement and give your opinion. v. 1
In a world with an ever-growing population, providing housing is one of the crucial tasks of all governments. At the same time, however, the environment has to be protected from too much destruction and deforestation. Different solutions have been created to solve these problems. One significant solution could be increasing the height of buildings. When looking at the skyline of metropolitan cities, skyscrapers are becoming increasingly visible. The reason for this is simple: housing has to be provided, while the environment should suffer the least amount possible. Decreasing the building footprints of houses and therefore the destruction of the environment, while increasing the height, is an effective solution in overcoming this dilemma. This resolution also has its faults though, as increasing height also means that the sunlight reaching the streets will decrease and that housing will be built more densely in order to save space. Another possible solution is to increase building costs to pressure the population into living in smaller areas, which would save space. As this impacts members of the community unevenly depending on their wealth, this would encourage unequal living standards and conflicts as a result of this. Therefore, this is not a plausible solution to the problem. In my opinion, finding the perfect way to minimise environmental damage while increasing housing is a problem to which there is no simple solution. Many governments are currently relying on height to solve the problem, but this is not attractive to many people. Any solution chosen should be one that causes the fewest problems.
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governments
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however
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has to
be protected
from too much destruction and deforestation.
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solutions
have
been created
to solve these
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problems
. One significant
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solution
could be
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increasing
the
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height
of buildings.

When looking at the skyline of metropolitan cities, skyscrapers are becoming
increasingly
visible.
The reason for this is
simple: housing
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has to
be provided
, while the environment should suffer the least amount possible. Decreasing the building footprints of
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houses
and
therefore
the destruction of the environment, while
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increasing
the
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height
, is an effective
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solution
in overcoming this dilemma. This resolution
also
has its faults though, as
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increasing
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height
also
means that the sunlight reaching the streets will decrease and that housing will
be built
more
densely
in order to save space.

Another possible
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solution
is to increase building costs to pressure the population into living in smaller areas, which would save space. As this impacts members of the community
unevenly
depending on their wealth, this would encourage unequal living standards and conflicts
as a result
of this.
Therefore
, this is not a plausible
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solution
to the problem.

In my opinion, finding the perfect way to
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minimise
environmental damage while
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increasing
housing is a
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problem
to which there is no simple
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solution
.
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Many
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governments
are
currently
relying on
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height
to solve the
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problem
,
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but
this is not attractive to
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many
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people
. Any
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solution
chosen should be one that causes the fewest
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problems
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay One of the major problems that faces today’s governments is creating enough satisfactory housing for their increasing populations whilst still trying to protect the environment. Discuss this statement and give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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