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Some people prefer to make friends with people who have similar interests to theirs. Others prefer to make friends with people who have different interest to theirs. Which kind of friend do you prefer for yourself? Why? v.1

Some people prefer to make friends with people who have similar interests to theirs. Others prefer to make friends with people who have different interest to theirs. Which kind of friend do you prefer for yourself? Why? v. 1
Social media is a place where people meet, interact and share their thoughts. Different types of social media websites are available for the general public. Although there are many advantages of this kind of interaction places, there are some drawbacks also. In this essay we will discuss both the positive and the negative sides of social media. Social media connects people with each other in a far easier way, like with your friends, colleagues, relatives etc. These connecting sites are always open to share your views and experiences with others. You can find those friends or relatives also, with whom you are no longer in touch, by just searching them on this online site. If some old friend's contact number or mailing address has been changed, you can find them with the help of social media. Another benefit of using social media is, you can run any movement or become a part of any movement. An example is, when someone is not getting justice and want to draw attention of other people, he can start any movement on social sites and people can follow him there. Thus, social media is a beneficiary platform in many aspects. Even though social media has its advantages, it has two primary disadvantages also. First is, an excessive use of social media makes people live in a different world, they always prefer online conversation rather than communicating with their surrounding people, thus somewhere disconnecting them from the family and the peer groups. Another drawback is, sometime false messages get forwarded by this media, and that can cause fights and riots among public. An example is, recently one video in which one community is threatening other community's person, got viral on media. People without knowing the truth just started to forward and started to comment on it. Later it was revealed that, the clip was from some movie scene. So these kinds of disadvantages can harm the society's peace. Every technology comes with its pros and cons, same is with social media. What we need to do is focus on the positive site and try to minimize the negative effects.
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sides of
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media.

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connects
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with each
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in a far easier way, like with your friends, colleagues, relatives etc. These connecting
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sites
are always open to share your views and experiences with others. You can find those friends or relatives
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just
searching them on this online
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some
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friend's contact number or mailing address has been
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changed
, you can find them with the
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. Another benefit of using
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social
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media
is, you can run any movement or become a part of any movement. An example is, when someone is not getting justice and want to draw attention of
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other
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can follow him there.
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is a beneficiary platform in
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many
aspects.

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has its advantages, it has two primary disadvantages
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world, they always prefer online conversation
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, and that can cause fights and riots among public. An example is, recently one video in which one community is threatening
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other
community's person,
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without knowing the truth
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some
movie scene.
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these kinds of disadvantages can harm the society's peace.

Every technology
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with its pros and cons, same is with
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social
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media
. What we need to do is focus on the
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positive
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site
and try to minimize the
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effects.
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to make friends with people who have similar interests to theirs. Others prefer to make friends with people who have different interest to theirs. Which kind of friend do you prefer for yourself? Why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
354 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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