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Some people prefer to live in the same place most of their life but others like to live in different places Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.2

Some people prefer to live in the same place most of their life but others like to live in different places 2
Living in the same places can bring a comfortable and safety to lifestyles, whereas the frequent moving can enhance people' s flexibility and adaptability skills. We need to consider both perspectives before drawing a decision. These statements summarise my own mixed feelings towards the lifestyles. When people are living in the same place for a long, they are getting familiar with surroundings. In my opinion, people would not prefer to move, because they know the location of nearby stores, the public transportations routes, friends, families and daily paths so that they feel comfortable. Furthermore, people do not prefer to move around as they get ages. Old people tend to stay in the same place for comforts. Therefore, all these various factors would result people staying in places for a long. In contrast, other people prefer to live in other places because they can challenge their flexibility. When people are living in other places, they have to think creatively, logically and out of their regular patterns. All the new environments and the regular lifestyle patterns are changed when people are moved to other places, so every situations face the challenges. In addition to this activity, people will learn about adaptability. Since people have to get familiar to the areas and they have to make new friends or colleagues, their adaptation skills will be improved. In my perspective, moving to other places can provide more opportunities personally and economically. When people are move to new places, they will expand their horizons by accepting for new environments and even new cultures. Sometimes, new environments can lead to new career opportunities. When I move to Korea, I found new opportunities to become a teacher and that had developed my teaching abilities and creative thinking skills. In conclusion, there are some advantages and disadvantages for living in the same place or moving around. However, in my perspective, the moving around places have distinctive benefits for the better opportunities in career perspectives and for the enhancement of various skills.
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can enhance
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perspectives
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before
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my
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mixed feelings towards the lifestyles.

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in the same
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for a long, they are getting familiar with surroundings. In my opinion,
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people
would not prefer to
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,
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they know the location of nearby stores, the public transportations routes, friends, families and daily paths
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that they feel comfortable.
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do not prefer to
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around as they
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ages.
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Old
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tend to stay in the same
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for comforts.
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staying in
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for a long.

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prefer to
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in
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they can challenge their flexibility. When
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are
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, they
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think
creatively
,
logically
and out of their regular patterns. All the
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environments and the regular lifestyle patterns are
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changed
when
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are
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,
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face the challenges.
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will learn about adaptability. Since
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people
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friends or colleagues, their adaptation
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will be
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In my
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can provide more
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. When
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, they will expand their horizons by accepting for
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environments and even
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cultures.
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environments can lead to
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career
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. When I
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to Korea, I found
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new
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opportunities
to become a teacher and that had developed my teaching abilities and creative thinking
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skills
.

In conclusion
, there are
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advantages and disadvantages for
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in the same
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place
or
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moving
around.
However
, in my
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, the
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around
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places
have distinctive benefits for the better
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opportunities
in career
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and for the enhancement of various
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.
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I love commuting between languages just like I love commuting between cultures and cities.
Elif Safak

IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in the same place most of their life but others like to live in different places 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
333 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
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