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Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climate. Discuss both the view and give your opinion. v.3

Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climate. v. 3
It is often believed by some people that the summer lifestyle is better compared to the cold winter life. However, there are both advantages and disadvantages in both the lifestyle's. I think that cold climate is good and pleasant to live. Firstly, In summers people do not need to wear huge clothes as it is hot. I mean that the temperature on a typical summer day is higher than 27 degree Celsius. Hence it is an ideal season for light clothing, moreover, people can enjoy going to a pool or a nearby beach to get relaxed. For Example, In India, children often get summer break from their studies to enjoy and explore more. Additionally, In hot climates there is chance of enjoying cold desserts and soft drinks, which are mostly liked by everyone. This is why some people like hot climates as it give more space for enjoyment. Turning on to the other side of the argument, lifestyle in cold countries has been advanced yet uncomfortable. In other words, people living in a cold climate have to be in their homes for much of the time as there is a chance of cold injuries like fever and cold. In contrast, Unlike hot seasons there is no water problem. What I mean by this is that in summer months due to an increase in the temperature, ground water gets dried, resulting in a water crisis. For Instance, South Asian countries often lack water sources for agriculture and drinking, which is causing food shortages. In addition to this in the cold months people can enjoy any kind of food as there is no problem of dehydration. People can also enjoy winter sports during this season. It is all the above reasons why people like winter months. To sum up, although summer season provides some enjoyment, I always like the lifestyle of cold climate as they possess more benefits like the conditions for winter sports and lessen the risk of water scarcity.
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believed by
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some
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people
that the
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summer
lifestyle is better compared to the
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cold
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winter
life.
However
, there are both advantages and disadvantages in both the lifestyle's. I
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think
that
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cold
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climate
is
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good
and pleasant to
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live
.

Firstly
, In
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summers
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people
do not need to wear huge clothes as it is hot. I mean that the temperature on a typical
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summer
day is higher than 27 degree Celsius.
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Hence
it is an ideal
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season
for light clothing,
moreover
,
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people
can
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enjoy
going to a pool or a nearby beach to
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get
relaxed.
For Example
, In India, children
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often
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get
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summer
break from their studies to
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enjoy
and explore more.
Additionally
, In hot
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climates
there is chance of enjoying
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cold
desserts and soft drinks, which are
mostly
liked by everyone. This is why
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some
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people
like hot
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climates
as it give more space for enjoyment.

Turning on to the other side of the argument, lifestyle in
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cold
countries has
been advanced
yet
uncomfortable.
In other words
,
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people
living in a
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cold
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climate
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have to
be in their homes for much of the time as there is a chance of
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cold
injuries like fever and
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cold
.
In contrast
, Unlike hot
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seasons
there is no
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water
problem. What I mean by this is that in
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summer
months due to an increase in the temperature, ground
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water
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gets
dried, resulting in a
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water
crisis.
For Instance
, South Asian countries
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often
lack
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water
sources for agriculture and drinking, which is causing food shortages.
In addition
to this in the
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cold
months
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people
can
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enjoy
any kind of food as there is no problem of dehydration.
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can
also
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enjoy
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winter
sports during this
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season
. It is all the above reasons why
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people
like
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winter
months.

To sum up, although
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summer
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season
provides
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some
enjoyment, I always like the lifestyle of
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cold
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climate
as they possess more benefits like the conditions for
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winter
sports and lessen the
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risk
of
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water
scarcity.
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climate. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
8
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