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Fast-paced modern lifestyles have led to people eating more and more fast food at the expense of more traditional meals. Do the advantages of eating more fast food outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Fast-paced modern lifestyles have led to people eating more and more fast food at the expense of more traditional meals. Do the advantages of eating more fast food outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
Replacing conventional meals with junk food is fast becoming the norm for many people, and while this may be more practical, it presents some serious concerns for health and productivity. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of this shift in behaviour. The most serious disadvantage of this issue is the damage to health. In other words, eating fast food regularly means increased consumption of harmful fats and chemical additives. Studies show that consuming these regularly can increase the risk of conditions such as cancer or heart disease. In addition to the increased risk of disease, being less healthy has a negative effect on productivity. For example, convenience food often contains fewer nutrients, and this can make people lethargic and affect performance. Essentially, eating fast food regularly can cause serious damage to a person’s health, and this will negatively affect their abilities in other areas. On the other hand, eating convenience food can save valuable time. There are times when people with busy schedules would be forced to skip meals if fast food options were not available. Our bodies need nutrition and it is probably better to eat one of the healthier fast food options than not to eat at all. For instance, picking up a quick snack from a fast food restaurant might be the only chance to eat for working people with very tight schedules. To sum up, the pace of modern life means that fast food is sometimes the most practical option. In conclusion, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages because health has to be a priority for most people. The increased productivity and life expectancy that good health brings is far more important than the short-term gains offered by a fast food diet.
Replacing conventional meals with junk
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is
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becoming the norm for
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many
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people
, and while this may be more practical, it presents
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some
serious concerns for
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health
and productivity. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of this shift in
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behaviour
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The most serious disadvantage of this issue is the damage to
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health
.
In other words
, eating
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fast
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food
regularly
means increased consumption of harmful fats and chemical additives. Studies
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show
that consuming these
regularly
can increase the
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risk
of conditions such as cancer or heart disease.
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risk
of disease, being less healthy has a
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negative
effect on productivity.
For example
, convenience
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food
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often
contains fewer nutrients, and this can
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make
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people
lethargic and affect performance.
Essentially
, eating
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fast
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food
regularly
can cause serious damage to a person’s
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health
, and this will
negatively
affect their abilities in other areas.

On the other hand
, eating convenience
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food
can save valuable time. There are times when
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people
with busy schedules would
be forced
to skip meals if
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fast
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options were not available. Our bodies need nutrition and it is
probably
better to eat one of the healthier
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fast
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options than not to eat at all.
For instance
, picking up a quick snack from a
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fast
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restaurant might be the
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only
chance to eat for working
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people
with
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tight schedules. To sum up, the pace of modern life means that
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fast
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is
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sometimes
the most practical option.

In conclusion
, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages
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because
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health
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has to
be a priority for most
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people
. The increased productivity and life expectancy that
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good
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brings is far more
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important
than the short-term gains offered by a
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fast
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diet.
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IELTS essay Fast-paced modern lifestyles have led to people eating more and more fast food at the expense of more traditional meals. Do the advantages of eating more fast food outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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