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Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.7

Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. v. 7
It is true that the question of whether life in megacities is much more convenient than small town remains a source of vigorous debate. While many individuals choose to live in a big city, I would argue that the life in small town is highly comfortable. On the one hand, there are various reasons why people tend to settle in megacities. Firstly, there is no point in denying that there are many companies and large organisations in big city, which provide more and better job opportunities, which is seldom attain if job hunters come to live in small town or rural areas. Therefore, if people live in metropolitan, then it is more likely that they could have chances to shake off poverty and climb higher in social ladder. Furthermore, those who are inclined to settle in megacities believe that they would get access to all the excellent health care facility, which yield tangle and immidiate benefits. If, for example, city dwellers suffer from heart attack, stroke, and asthma, then they will be administered treatment in no time due to the fact that first-class hospitals and health clinics are close to there apartments. On the other hand, I strongly believe that living in small town is much more convenient. One possible reason is that thanks to settling in small town, inhabitants themselves could get away from massively endless traffic jams, which is the headache of provincial governments. Although the transportation infrastructure in small towns is not very excellent, with the small local population, there is less severe traffic congestion, compared to that of megacities. Besides, those inhabitants could promote sense of community when they come to settle in little towns because town is smaller and less hectic than megacity. Consequently, they could foster the social solidarity easier than the city counterparts. In conclusion, although state of the art facility and job prospects could stand the megacities in good stead, it seems to me that life in small towns would be more appealing.
It is true that
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the question of whether
life in
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megacities
is much more convenient than
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small
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town
remains a source of vigorous debate. While
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many
individuals choose to
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live
in a
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big
city, I would argue that the life in
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small
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town
is
highly
comfortable.

On the one hand, there are various reasons why
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people
tend to settle in
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megacities
.
Firstly
, there is no point in denying that there are
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many
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companies
and large
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organisations
in
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big
city, which provide more and better job opportunities, which is seldom attain if job hunters
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come
to
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live
in
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small
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town
or rural areas.
Therefore
, if
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people
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live
in metropolitan, then it is more likely that they could have chances to shake off poverty and climb higher in social ladder.
Furthermore
, those who
are inclined
to settle in
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megacities
believe that they would
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get
access to all the excellent health care facility, which yield tangle and
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immidiate
benefits. If,
for example
, city dwellers suffer from heart attack, stroke, and asthma, then they will
be administered
treatment in no time due to the fact that
first
-
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class
hospitals and health clinics are close to
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there
apartments.

On the other hand
, I
strongly
believe that living in
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small
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town
is much more convenient. One possible reason is that thanks to settling in
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small
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town
, inhabitants themselves could
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get
away from
massively
endless traffic jams, which is the headache of provincial
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governments
. Although the transportation infrastructure in
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small
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towns
is not
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very
excellent, with the
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small
local population, there is less severe traffic congestion, compared to that of
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megacities
.
Besides
, those inhabitants could promote sense of community when they
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come
to settle in
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little
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towns
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because
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town
is smaller and less hectic than
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megacity
.
Consequently
, they could foster the social solidarity easier than the city counterparts.

In conclusion
, although
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state of the art
facility and job prospects could stand the
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megacities
in
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good
stead, it seems to me that life in
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small
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towns
would be more appealing.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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