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some people prefer to live in a small town. other prefer to live in a big city. which place would you prefer to live in? use specific reasons and details to support your answers v.6

some people prefer to live in a small town. other prefer to live in a big city. which place would you prefer to live in? use specific reasons and details to support your answers v. 6
In the human beings' history, females have a significant role in the civilization; however, their endeavours to nations have not been always recognized worldwide. Some people advocate that respecting and honouring females are crucial to the development of nations. I definitely opine this view due to females' unique roles in human societies and the essay will discuss my view. To begin with, firstly, it is a fact that nations that have promoted equal social status among genders have developed and evolved dramatically in the world. Many European countries' histories provide profound evidences that feminism activities played a leading role in individual national development because these activities enhanced the social status of females in families or societies. By advocating women's rights, women there have earned credits from their male peers and are allowed to contribute themselves to all economic sectors not only as housewives rather professionals. For instance, in the ancient China, feminism had been suppressed in many dynasties until the establishment of current China government. Chinese government has improved its national status among the world by promoting feminism and allowing females to take important occupations in China.  As a result, countries with high awareness of feminism have the better economic performance and become stronger. However, it is a fact that, in certain regions of the world, especially in middle eastern nations, local female residents remain being debarred by their traditional doctrines. The development of these nations has been holding back due to imbalance roles of the genders in the societies. Male dominated societies tend to suffer from wars or conflicts which also contribute to their slow social development in all economic sectors. In conclusion,  advocating feminism will enhance the social status of females and contribute to national development in all sectors due to the above reasons. Therefore, it is crucial to convey the message that respecting and honouring women are one of basic social values of ordinary citizens, even more important to the youth who are the leaders of the future.
In the human beings' history,
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females
have a significant
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role
in the civilization;
however
, their
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endeavours
to
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nations
have not been always recognized worldwide.
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Some
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people
advocate that respecting and
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honouring
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females
are crucial to the
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development
of
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nations
. I definitely opine this view due to females' unique
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roles
in human
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societies
and the essay will discuss my view.

To
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begin
with,
firstly
, it is a fact that
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nations
that have promoted equal
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social
status among genders have developed and evolved
dramatically
in the world.
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Many
European countries' histories provide profound evidences that
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feminism
activities played a leading
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role
in individual national
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development
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because
these activities enhanced the
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social
status of
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females
in families or
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societies
. By advocating women's rights, women there have earned credits from their male peers and are
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allowed
to contribute themselves to all economic sectors not
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only
as housewives
rather
professionals.
For instance
, in the ancient China,
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feminism
had
been suppressed
in
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many
dynasties until the establishment of
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current
China
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government
. Chinese
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government
has
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improved
its national status among the world by promoting
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feminism
and allowing
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females
to take
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important
occupations in China.  
As a result
, countries with high awareness of
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feminism
have the better economic performance and become stronger.

However
, it is a fact that, in certain regions of the world,
especially
in middle eastern
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nations
, local
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female
residents remain
being debarred
by their traditional doctrines. The
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development
of these
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nations
has been holding back due to imbalance
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roles
of the genders in the
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societies
. Male dominated
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societies
tend to suffer from wars or conflicts which
also
contribute to their slow
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social
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development
in all economic sectors.

In conclusion
,
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advocating
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feminism
will enhance the
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social
status of
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females
and contribute to national
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development
in all sectors due to the above reasons.
Therefore
, it is crucial to convey the message that respecting and
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honouring
women are one of basic
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social
values of ordinary citizens, even more
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important
to the youth who are the leaders of the future.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay some people prefer to live in a small town. other prefer to live in a big city. which place would you prefer to live in? use specific reasons and details to support your answers v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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