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Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v.1

Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 1
It is a clear fact that people need to live in some places like countryside or town centre. In this context, some people believe living in a small town, whereas some other people believe just the opposite for some reasons. For me, I prefer to live in the town centre for some reasons. In this following paragraph, I will try to explain why I think so. As it is a clear fact from above, I prefer to live in a big city because big cities have more amenities. First of all, one reason to choose a big city for people to live is that a city provides better life conditions and services, like health care services, better public transportation, entertainment, etc. For example, there are more health centres in the city, so people can easily reach these places for any disease or emergency. Thus, people want to live in better living conditions. In addition to this, people have more job and education opportunities in a city. People tend to live in a big city to access everything they need, such as education, job opportunities, business networks or etc. What I mean is that human population increases noticeably and human demands rise every day too. These demands can only be met in an urban environment because of the fact that there are more sector opportunities in a city for people to use. For example, a young person naturally wants to indulge himself/herself better in a city by attending good schools, participating some social activities, such as theatres, cinemas, meetings and he/she has a wide range of job options in a city environment. All in all, in the light of the aforementioned points, it can be effortlessly concluded that people have different choices about where to live as it is the same for almost everything. As it is obvious may choice is for living in a big city because of some favourable opportunities a city can offer.
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other
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reasons. For me, I prefer to
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As it is a
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live
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cities
have more amenities.
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, one reason to choose a
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city for
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people
to
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is that a city provides
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better
life conditions and services, like health care services,
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better
public transportation, entertainment, etc.
For example
, there are more health
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centres
in the city,
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people
can
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,
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people
want to
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living conditions.

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people
have more job and education
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opportunities
in a city.
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tend to
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live
in a
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big
city to access everything they need, such as education, job
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opportunities
, business networks or etc. What I mean is that human population increases
noticeably
and human demands rise every day too. These demands can
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only
be met
in an urban environment
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because of the fact that
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people
to
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.
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schools, participating
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social activities, such as
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theatres
, cinemas,
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meetings and
he/she has a wide range of job options in a city environment.

All in all, in the light of the aforementioned points, it can be
effortlessly
concluded that
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choices about where to
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live
as it is the same for almost everything. As it is obvious may choice is for living in a
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big
city
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because
of
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some
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favourable
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opportunities
a city can offer.
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31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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