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some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel tjat there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with livinv in an apartment? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel tjat there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with livinv in an apartment? v. 1
There is no doubt that due to increased urbanisation housing has become a major problem. A few individuals choose to luve in a house while others prefer to live in an apartment. This essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of living in an apartment and I will tend to agree with the latter view. One of the most significant benefit of living in a house is privacy. People enjoy free space such as large rooms, car parking and garden. They argue that they can build and design the house as per their concenience. However, living in an own house brings in extra cost of maintainance and lot of care is needed and is not much suitable for nuclear family. Nevertheless, it is a fact that the apartment concept is nowadays widely accepted by the society. So its benefits cannot be ignored. For instance, the maintainance is taken care of by the society. There is a helpline number on that you can make call regarding any issue you are facing. Residing in an apartment offers you many recreational activities in bonus such as swimming, gym. Individuals dwelling their does not have any tension regarding child safety due to 24×7 security ensured in societies. In contrast, people living in apartment face some problems such as noise from neighbouring houses and parking space. Evidently, living in aprtment is far more convenient than staying in individual houses. In conclusion, although own houses have privacy but positive aspects of apartments do outweigh them. In my view, it is comfortable to stay in apartments after viewing its advantages.
There is no doubt that due to increased
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urbanisation
housing has become a major problem. A few individuals choose to
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luve
in a
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house
while others prefer to
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live
in an
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apartment
. This essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of
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living
in an
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apartment
and I will tend to
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agree
with the latter view.

One of the most significant benefit of
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living
in a
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house
is privacy.
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People
enjoy free space such as large rooms, car parking and garden. They argue that they can build and design the
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house
as per their
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concenience
.
However
,
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living
in an
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own
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house
brings in extra cost of
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maintainance
and
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lot of
care
is needed
and is not much suitable for nuclear family.

Nevertheless
, it is a fact that the
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apartment
concept is nowadays
widely
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accepted
by the society.
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So
its benefits cannot be
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ignored
.
For instance
, the
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maintainance
is taken
care of by the society. There is a helpline number on that you can
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make
call regarding any issue you are facing. Residing in an
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apartment
offers you
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many
recreational activities in bonus such as swimming, gym. Individuals dwelling their does not have any tension regarding child safety due to 24×7 security ensured in societies.
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,
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people
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living
in
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apartment
face
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some
problems such as noise from
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neighbouring
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houses
and parking space.
Evidently
,
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living
in
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aprtment
is far more convenient than staying in individual
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houses
.

In conclusion
, although
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own
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houses
have privacy
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but
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positive
aspects of
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apartments
do outweigh them. In my view, it is comfortable to stay in
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apartments
after viewing its advantages.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel tjat there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with livinv in an apartment? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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