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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there is more advantage to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v.3

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there is more advantage to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 3
More often we can hear that everybody dreaming to buy a place for living to establish homes in. Truthfully, many people believe that living in a house is more beneficial than in the building. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument and explain if living in the home have pros against living in the apartment. It is true that houses ensuring better quality of life and more commodities for a family. As an example, the families within a more children can ensure enough space in the house and at least a small yard for outdoor activities. Also, commute and neighbours are more often, longer in the same place, because of that is more secure than living in the building blocks. However, a disadvantage is longer travelling time to the city and job. In addition, life in the apartment brings different advantages and environment. This living style prefers younger people, because of the dynamics and nightlife. For instance, the apartment gives commodity of urban area within all necessary stuff what surrounding them. As the examples are shops and offices. Furthermore, constant people turn over made this accomodation type less secure for the living. Taking everything into consideration, even both accomodation types have pros and cons we can declare if it is more beneficial to live in the house rather in the apartments. In short, this purely depending of the human's lifestyle and living needs, same as if we are living alone or with family. All of it rarely depends on the period people are in, which circumstances can be changed every day.
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buy
a place for
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living
to establish homes in.
Truthfully
,
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many
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people
believe that
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living
in a
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house
is more beneficial than in the building. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument and
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explain
if
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living
in the home have pros against
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living
in the apartment.

It is true that
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houses
ensuring better quality of life and more commodities for a family. As an example, the families within a more children can ensure
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enough
space in the
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house
and at least a
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small
yard for outdoor activities.
Also
, commute and
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neighbours
are more
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often
, longer in the same place,
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because
of
that is
more secure than
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living
in the building blocks.
However
, a disadvantage is longer travelling time to the city and job.

In addition
, life in the apartment brings
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different
advantages and environment. This
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living
style prefers younger
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people
,
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because
of the dynamics and nightlife.
For instance
, the apartment gives commodity of urban area within all necessary stuff what surrounding them. As the examples are shops and offices.
Furthermore
, constant
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people
turn over made this
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accomodation
type less secure for the living.

Taking everything into consideration, even both
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accomodation
types have pros and cons we can declare if it is more beneficial to
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live
in the
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house
rather
in the apartments. In short, this
purely
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depending
of the human's lifestyle and
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living
needs, same as if we are
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living
alone or with family. All of it rarely depends on the period
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people
are in, which circumstances can be
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changed
every day.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there is more advantage to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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