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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v.28

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 28
A home is being considered as a paradise on the earth as it could be a destination after a hectic day. These days we have multiple options for the home, like an independent house or an apartment. Different people have different views on choosing a type of accommodation. Firstly, let us look at the pros and cons of the house. An independent house is always considered as a status symbol. This could be one of the reasons that the majority of the film stars own a house rather than a flat. Another advantage could be; a personalised space is gained by living in a house. You are the owner of the area so you can change it as per your convenience. However, personal space could be quite expensive. It is known that houses are more expensive than an apartment. At times a house might not be a safe place to live. For example, it is not surprising to read news about murder and robbery in the villas these days. Nevertheless, it is a fact that the apartment concept is widely accepted by society, so its benefits cannot be ignored. Though living in an apartment could be noisy sometimes, it is a safe place to live in. For instance, a thief would think twice before entering into a place where many people are living. Moreover, a security guard is easily affordable in an apartment compared to a house. An apartment could be a good option for people who like to socialise more. For example, a conversation started with a simple hello, turns into a long hour chat. You tend to meet different kinds of people so there are higher chances of finding alike minded people in apartments. In this global world, people stay away from their families because of work. However, a party organised by the apartments secretaries could make people feel like celebrating festivals with families. I believe, it is an individual's choice to decide a kind of place to live. However, being a very social person I would prefer to live in an apartment.
A home is
being considered
as a paradise on the earth as it could be a destination after a hectic day. These days we have multiple options for the home, like an independent
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house
or an
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apartment
.
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Different
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people
have
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different
views on choosing a type of accommodation.

Firstly
,
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let
us look at the pros and cons of the
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house
. An independent
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house
is always considered as a status symbol. This could be one of the reasons that the majority of the film stars
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own
a
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house
rather
than a flat. Another advantage could be; a
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personalised
space
is gained
by living in a
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house
. You are the owner of the area
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so
you can
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change
it as per your convenience.
However
, personal space could be quite expensive. It
is known
that
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houses
are more expensive than an
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apartment
. At times a
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house
might not be a safe
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place
to
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live
.
For example
, it is not surprising to read news about murder and robbery in the villas these days.

Nevertheless
, it is a fact that the
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apartment
concept is
widely
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accepted
by society,
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so
its benefits cannot be
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ignored
. Though living in an
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apartment
could be noisy
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sometimes
, it is a safe
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place
to
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live
in.
For instance
, a thief would
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think
twice
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before
entering into a
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place
where
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many
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people
are living.
Moreover
, a security guard is
easily
affordable in an
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apartment
compared to a
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house
.

An
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apartment
could be a
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good
option for
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people
who like to
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socialise
more.
For example
, a conversation
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started
with a simple hello, turns into a long hour chat. You tend to
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meet
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different
kinds of
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people
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so
there are higher chances of finding alike minded
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people
in
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apartments
. In this global world,
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people
stay away from their families
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because
of work.
However
, a party
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organised
by the
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apartments
secretaries could
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make
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people
feel like celebrating festivals with families.

I believe, it is an individual's choice to decide a kind of
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place
to
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live
.
However
, being a
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very
social person I would prefer to
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live
in an
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apartment
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 28

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
345 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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