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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v.27

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 27
Growing urbanisation has led to the lacking of space and thus a large number of people are opting to live in apartments. However, some people still prefer to live in a house. This essay explores the advantages and disadvantages of both these style of living before coming to a logical conclusion. Till a few decades back, living in individual houses was the most common norm. This was not only due to the fact that land was easily available but also due to the size of the family. The extended family lived and worked together. The house was generally accompanied by a large garden and ample space for the children to play. Even today, people living in houses prefer to do so because they value their privacy and need their own space. They also argue that they can build and design the house layout as per their convenience. However, living in a house comes with a high maintenance cost and extra effort. However, people living in an apartment does not have to spend much on maintenance. The maintenance is taken care of by society. There is a helpline number that you can call at any time of the day for any issue that you face. Besides, working parents also vouch for the safety of their children within such gated communities. The only discomfort faced by people living in apartments is the lack of privacy and space. The choice of living in a house or in an apartment depends on factors such as availability, rental costs and need and hence a particular style of living cannot be deemed to be the better than the other.
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urbanisation
has led to the lacking of space and
thus
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apartments
.
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some
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people
still
prefer to
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house
. This essay explores the advantages and disadvantages of both these style of
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living
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before
coming to a logical conclusion.

Till a few decades back,
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living
in individual
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houses
was the most common norm. This was not
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only
due to the fact that land was
easily
available
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but
also
due to the size of the family. The extended family
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lived
and worked together. The
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house
was
generally
accompanied by a large garden and ample space for the children to play. Even
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today
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people
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because
they value their privacy and need their
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own
space. They
also
argue that they can build and design the
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house
layout as per their convenience.
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living
in a
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house
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comes
with a high maintenance cost and extra effort.

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,
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people
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living
in an
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apartment
does not
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have to
spend much on maintenance. The maintenance
is taken
care of by society. There is a helpline number that you can call at any time of the day for any issue that you face.
Besides
, working parents
also
vouch for the safety of their children within such gated communities. The
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only
discomfort faced by
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people
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living
in
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apartments
is the lack of privacy and space.

The choice of
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living
in a
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house
or in an
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apartment
depends on factors such as availability, rental costs and need and
hence
a particular style of
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living
cannot
be deemed
to be the better than the other.
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 27

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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